Chapter 7 - Condemned's Origin
Submitted July 16, 2008 Updated September 19, 2010 Status Incomplete | neh. A basic fight between Condemned and Eclipse for control over Eclipse's body. Sometimes it would go too far... More stories are to be added!
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Chapter 7 - Condemned's Origin
Chapter 7 - Condemned's Origin
A long while back, when the echidnas were the dominant species, there was a mighty clan that was greater than all the others; the Jakoi Tribe.
They were known for many things: pride, strength, and a fantastic assortment of weapons - but they were mostly known for one thing; their great leader, Aine Ak Alar. The strong echidna would train his hunters until they became what seemed like "superpowered". He would see to it that his tribe would be the healthiest, smartest, and most evolved of all the tribes. Everyone loved him.
Well... not EVERYONE...
Aine Ak Alar's little brother was an echidna of jealousy and anger... his name was Haine Al Alar. He dispised his brother so much because people loved the leader, and shunned Haine. The reason why they scoffed at Haine so much was because of his odd blue color, the color he was born with. Echidnas were supposed to be red and brown and colors of the desert, but Haine... Haine was the color of ice, and death, and he showed a sign of bad luck for the whole tribe.
And that's why they hated Haine. It mattered not if he was royal.
Finally, Haine Al Alar was fed up. He devised a plan in which he would kill his older brother, and become the new leader. That afternoon, Haine crept in his older brother's room as he lay asleep for his afternoon rest. Haine pulled out an obsidian dagger, and plunged it deep within Aine's skull, instantly killing him.
After a few hours, the Jokai Tribe wondered where their leader could be. They finally sent a hunter to investigate the leader's room, only to find Aine Ak Alar still as stone on his own bed, with blood spilling out of his skull.
The tribe blamed Haine for such bad luck.
"It's your fault! You were the omen that foresaw the death of our great leader!"
"We should have killed you the first chance we got!"
When the uproar got too loud, the tribe's shamen decided to hold a meeting.
"We will find out what REALLY killed our great Aine Ak Alar. If it WAS by bad luck, then Haine Al Alar shall be sacrificed to please our god. If it was by any other reason, he shall be spared, and become our new leader.
And so, the great shamen lit a fire, and threw the blood of Aine Ak Alar in. He said a few sacred chants, then boomed the words,
"GREAT LEADER OF THE JOKAI TRIBE! TELL US, WHY ARE YOU DECEASED?"
At first, there was no answer, but then, from inside the fire, a red smoke began to rise and form the sad eyes of Aine Ak Alar. His voice filled the room.
"I have been murdered."
There were screams and roars of protest and death to the murderer all around the shamen's hut. It finally died down when the shaman held to his lips the finger of silence.
"Who has murdered you, o leader? We wish to avenge you." The Shaman asked the red smoke.
It responded.
"My spirit cannot rest in peace, for i am stricken with grief. The name of my murderer is that of Haine Al Alar, my younger brother. Avenge me. Strip him of his body like he has mine..."
Another uproar, this time louder than the last one. Everyone grabbed at Haine, wanting to make him suffer, to make him die. They spat at him, and begged the Shamen to let them execute him.
But the Shamen said "enough".
"We will not beat him, burn him, impale him, or any of that..."
everyone was shocked, until he finished his sentence.
"... we will do as our leader wishes. We will strip him of his body."
"But how?" A young echidna asked.
"By banishing him."
And so, they strapped Haine Al Alar down to the sacrificial rock, and put foul smelling powders all over him. They then drenched him in boiling mammoth blood, and burned a firey circle around him. When that was done, the Shamen spoke haunting incantations, ripping Haine's evil soul from his body. Haine screamed out in pain, and begged the Shamen to stop, but he wouldn't. He spoke the incantations for such not much longer, then said one final sentence before Haine's blue soul was released:
"YOU...ARE...CONDEMNED!!!"
and he was gone.
They were known for many things: pride, strength, and a fantastic assortment of weapons - but they were mostly known for one thing; their great leader, Aine Ak Alar. The strong echidna would train his hunters until they became what seemed like "superpowered". He would see to it that his tribe would be the healthiest, smartest, and most evolved of all the tribes. Everyone loved him.
Well... not EVERYONE...
Aine Ak Alar's little brother was an echidna of jealousy and anger... his name was Haine Al Alar. He dispised his brother so much because people loved the leader, and shunned Haine. The reason why they scoffed at Haine so much was because of his odd blue color, the color he was born with. Echidnas were supposed to be red and brown and colors of the desert, but Haine... Haine was the color of ice, and death, and he showed a sign of bad luck for the whole tribe.
And that's why they hated Haine. It mattered not if he was royal.
Finally, Haine Al Alar was fed up. He devised a plan in which he would kill his older brother, and become the new leader. That afternoon, Haine crept in his older brother's room as he lay asleep for his afternoon rest. Haine pulled out an obsidian dagger, and plunged it deep within Aine's skull, instantly killing him.
After a few hours, the Jokai Tribe wondered where their leader could be. They finally sent a hunter to investigate the leader's room, only to find Aine Ak Alar still as stone on his own bed, with blood spilling out of his skull.
The tribe blamed Haine for such bad luck.
"It's your fault! You were the omen that foresaw the death of our great leader!"
"We should have killed you the first chance we got!"
When the uproar got too loud, the tribe's shamen decided to hold a meeting.
"We will find out what REALLY killed our great Aine Ak Alar. If it WAS by bad luck, then Haine Al Alar shall be sacrificed to please our god. If it was by any other reason, he shall be spared, and become our new leader.
And so, the great shamen lit a fire, and threw the blood of Aine Ak Alar in. He said a few sacred chants, then boomed the words,
"GREAT LEADER OF THE JOKAI TRIBE! TELL US, WHY ARE YOU DECEASED?"
At first, there was no answer, but then, from inside the fire, a red smoke began to rise and form the sad eyes of Aine Ak Alar. His voice filled the room.
"I have been murdered."
There were screams and roars of protest and death to the murderer all around the shamen's hut. It finally died down when the shaman held to his lips the finger of silence.
"Who has murdered you, o leader? We wish to avenge you." The Shaman asked the red smoke.
It responded.
"My spirit cannot rest in peace, for i am stricken with grief. The name of my murderer is that of Haine Al Alar, my younger brother. Avenge me. Strip him of his body like he has mine..."
Another uproar, this time louder than the last one. Everyone grabbed at Haine, wanting to make him suffer, to make him die. They spat at him, and begged the Shamen to let them execute him.
But the Shamen said "enough".
"We will not beat him, burn him, impale him, or any of that..."
everyone was shocked, until he finished his sentence.
"... we will do as our leader wishes. We will strip him of his body."
"But how?" A young echidna asked.
"By banishing him."
And so, they strapped Haine Al Alar down to the sacrificial rock, and put foul smelling powders all over him. They then drenched him in boiling mammoth blood, and burned a firey circle around him. When that was done, the Shamen spoke haunting incantations, ripping Haine's evil soul from his body. Haine screamed out in pain, and begged the Shamen to stop, but he wouldn't. He spoke the incantations for such not much longer, then said one final sentence before Haine's blue soul was released:
"YOU...ARE...CONDEMNED!!!"
and he was gone.
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mechadragon13 on September 11, 2008, 3:17:01 AM
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TheGameArtCritic on September 13, 2008, 1:25:12 PM
me: indeed. His one weakness. Besides seeing his friends and family hurt. BECAUSE IT HURTS HIM.
Condmened: *talks through Eclipse* stupid hybrid... you're not an echidna, and you're not a wolf. You're a wolfidna. No, I'm sorry... YOU'RE DIRTY. YOU DIRTY FILTHY MUTT.
Me: ok, Condemned, NOW you're asking for it.
Condmened: *talks through Eclipse* stupid hybrid... you're not an echidna, and you're not a wolf. You're a wolfidna. No, I'm sorry... YOU'RE DIRTY. YOU DIRTY FILTHY MUTT.
Me: ok, Condemned, NOW you're asking for it.
mechadragon13 on September 14, 2008, 6:52:13 AM
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mechadragon13 on September 15, 2008, 7:37:04 AM
TheGameArtCritic on September 15, 2008, 9:23:43 AM
me: as do i. Now all we see is discrimination and racism... not to mention death and hate...
Eclipse: there... see? It's all good.
Me: y-yeah.. it's... it's all... *starts to cry*
Eclipse: What? What's wrong??
Me: it's... and you... and... *snifflesob*
Eclipse: i don't know what you're talking a... ab... ack! *coughs, and becomes unsteady. He holds his throat, wide eyed*
Eclipse: there... see? It's all good.
Me: y-yeah.. it's... it's all... *starts to cry*
Eclipse: What? What's wrong??
Me: it's... and you... and... *snifflesob*
Eclipse: i don't know what you're talking a... ab... ack! *coughs, and becomes unsteady. He holds his throat, wide eyed*
mechadragon13 on September 15, 2008, 11:16:48 AM
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mechadragon13 on September 16, 2008, 1:18:16 PM
Me: it's ok...... i know it's your style, and i understand that. just, dont be too hard on yourself, ok? *smiles* AND NOW FOR SOMETHING COMPLETELY DIFFERENT! heheheh. lets go back over there.
MEANWHILE!!!
Twilight: ....... OHHH!!! i cant take it anymore!!!! *practically glomps eclipse, starting to tear up* i dont want you to go!!!! you cant just leave like that!!! i wont let you!!! *hugs him tighter*
MEANWHILE!!!
Twilight: ....... OHHH!!! i cant take it anymore!!!! *practically glomps eclipse, starting to tear up* i dont want you to go!!!! you cant just leave like that!!! i wont let you!!! *hugs him tighter*
TheGameArtCritic on September 16, 2008, 1:28:38 PM
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mechadragon13 on September 16, 2008, 2:08:25 PM
Twilight: *glare* you promised you wouldnt freak.
Me: no its not like thaaaaaat!! lightning knows ^^ she told him. she just.... kinda...... developed a thing for him after a while XD but its nothing major and/or serious ^^
Twilight: pfft. whatever. i told you it was a bad idea to tell them thaaaat. *hugz eclipse*
Me: no its not like thaaaaaat!! lightning knows ^^ she told him. she just.... kinda...... developed a thing for him after a while XD but its nothing major and/or serious ^^
Twilight: pfft. whatever. i told you it was a bad idea to tell them thaaaat. *hugz eclipse*
TheGameArtCritic on September 16, 2008, 2:10:55 PM
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Twilight: *feels totally useless* so thats it then. we're just gonna let him fade away untiil there's nothing left?? *sighs exasperatedly and sits down on the floor abruptly. she shakes her head and grumbles to herself*
Me: she hates feeling useless........ *sits down in the same manner twilight did* so do i...............
Twilight: *sings softly*
Who's got nothing to say
I'm not gonna wait around
Let you run my whole life down
So you can watch me fade away
Me: *joins twilly*
You try to fit
Fit me in your perfect box
You try to fit
Fit me in a perfect box
You let me slip between the cracks
Now I've faded
Into someone else
Made me someone I don't wanna be
Yeah I'm faded
My true colour's gone
Like a picture nobody sees
Yeah I've faded
Like I never was
Till I don't even know myself
Now I'm faded
Into what you want
But I'm not takin' it too well
Now I'm faded.............
Me: she hates feeling useless........ *sits down in the same manner twilight did* so do i...............
Twilight: *sings softly*
Who's got nothing to say
I'm not gonna wait around
Let you run my whole life down
So you can watch me fade away
Me: *joins twilly*
You try to fit
Fit me in your perfect box
You try to fit
Fit me in a perfect box
You let me slip between the cracks
Now I've faded
Into someone else
Made me someone I don't wanna be
Yeah I'm faded
My true colour's gone
Like a picture nobody sees
Yeah I've faded
Like I never was
Till I don't even know myself
Now I'm faded
Into what you want
But I'm not takin' it too well
Now I'm faded.............
Twilight: O.O no effing way!!!