Comments for Story #36218urn:uuid:b6fda188-36f5-1eac-9b50-3abc2fbb843aComment by BeautifullyDecayed2006-07-04T18:28:42-07:00
I like the idea of the story. I'm not really sure where it's going, but i looks good. Just a couple of suggestions. 1) I would make each part longer, the longer they are, the better the story is. A good amount is 1,000-3,000 words. 2) I would try to be more descriptive.
But other than that, this story seems pretty cool.]]>