Comments for Story #6512urn:uuid:2040242f-55c7-b182-8772-62cf293d1dbeComment by Live_Like_You_Mean_It2006-01-13T01:15:15-08:00
Make the lines of your poem seperate to each other, and then I'll marvel at your work ;)
(if you don't understand, e.g.
You give me reasons to cry,
Bit you always make me smile,
You tell me I should try,)]]>Comment by Living_Dead_Girl2005-11-20T12:45:20-08:00Comment by minerva282005-08-28T03:24:37-07:00
Like thr ryhm
I write poems like that too!
Hmm.. but if u really wanna twist a persons imagination u shud use words that can be felt,seen,smell and etc. that way a person cud really picture ur poem out.Like love for example ur just reading it nothing really pops out of a persons brain ^^
My english teacher made us attend a 3 day seminar on how to write a poem. That was the main idea i think during the seminar ever since then i did really improve ^^ sure he commented my poems in a nasty way but it sure helped me realize my mistakes.
hoped it help!
Oh and please use stanzas ^^ please and thank u ^^]]>Comment by _Sai_2005-08-26T04:56:02-07:00
Wow that's just perfect!
*Fave*]]>Comment by soalone10002005-08-19T13:30:14-07:00Comment by Genjo_Shyazo2005-07-31T00:30:14-07:00Comment by LizzardQueeng2005-07-08T06:33:43-07:00
add comas between "thoughts" Example;
"You give me reasons to cry, But you always make me smile," That way it's easier to read^^
*faves* you're so good^^ nice and Melancholic...]]>Comment by aquajogger2005-06-30T20:28:51-07:00
I'm not flaming you, but there are a couple lines where the rythym gets a bit thrown off. Umm... "That you'll be better than me", "But all I can do is sleep", and "I hope you're glad".
It's really nothing big, and I know that not all of the lines are the same length, I just thought I'd point those out.
I like it, though. It's sweet, in a sad way. Very nice work! d^_^b]]>Comment by Hyper_Freak2005-05-17T13:11:31-07:00Comment by BlizzardComics2005-05-09T18:45:59-07:00
yup, yup]]>