Haha! That gave me a good laugh! Not bad, but you might want to sketch the outline of the hair first, and then fill it in like you showed in your tutorial. Trust me, you get a much more defined shape, rather than what looks like a bunch of straws.
Please, don't take offense, I'm just trying to give you some advice. Keep it up!
Please, don't take offense, I'm just trying to give you some advice. Keep it up!