look through my eyes2

ok here is the second one i put both up because i couldn't decide which looked better so
this is my oc Ravenstar of treeclan (mine) and Jayfeather in tunderclan territory shortly after the end of Sunrise Jayfeather is just walking around and he finds Ravenstar wandering around.

"Who are you and what are you doing on Thunderclan territory?" Jayfeather yowled as he jumped up on a fallen tree
"I was just exploring." a she-cat said. He heard her turning in the grass. "Who are you? You must be a pretty good warrior if you caught me." Jayfeather was shocked She thinks i'm a warrior? Can't she see i'm blind?
"You still haven't answered my question. Who are you? And... i'm not a warrior." he couldn't understand why he didn't let her believe that he was a warrior.
"Oh... why not? You are a clan cat are you not?"
"I am a clan cat. But I am medicine cat." Why am i telling her this?
"My name is Ravenstar. What is your name?"
"Star... Isn't that a leaders name? I haven't heard of anyone dying."
"Oh well i have been leader of treeclan for a least three moons now. You seem distressed. Why?"
"None of your business!"
"Oh. So your the one i had a dream about."
"What?" Who is this cat?
"Jayfeather," WHAT!? She knows my name? "Look through me eyes."
"I can't i'm blind can't you see that."
"It has never stopped me. Now please." Suddenly he saw two lights that slowly turned into a pair of purple-blue eyes. Jayfeather, don't run, don't hide. All things change, there wil be time in life all you will know is darkness. He heard a voice like the she-cat's but familiar in another way. Then he saw a reflection in in the eyes, they were his own. But one set looked more certain then he felt. But you'll see I'll be there watching over you. All the things you can change there is meaning to all that has happened. Wait?! Who are you


well if that is not confusing to you then you are must certainly strange because i'm still trying to figure it out myself. this pic was inspired by the song Look through my eyes http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hDJgSbzF5d0 and this vid and i thought since ravnestar is blind as well maybe she could be telling Jay something about it so this is what came out. oh and if you are wondering about the other set of eyes they are his but sorta his older self that is also the familiar voice
anyway comment and enjoy on my weirdness^^