Contact. Teaser Page

Ok, just to start off, YES, this is greytoned. Why? Beause it's just a TEASER. IE: The real version will be darkened and coloured. Der. Anyhow, this is the first page of my doujin "Contact". If you haven't read it on SheezyArt yet, the address is: http://hikarushirou*sheezyart*com<br />
Place a period in place of the stars because FAC is weird and doesn't allow HTML in our descriptions anymore. >_>; Which sucks.. anyhow... if noted on the original version (the one in sheezy) the art is somewhat lacking "professionalism" and is just a sketchy penned version. Whoo. I want to make it all spiffy and professional looking like Kiki-sama. D: But I'm lazy and the steps to do such a thing are too long so I thought to re-draw in Flash. But this took quite a while to do (since i was tracing it from the original somewhat) so I'm not sure what to do.... anyone have any ideas? Or is this one good and I should just REDRAW the pages instead of trying to trace? :o