Thanks for the comment ^___^ evryone elses comment on my pioc was negative so I erased them all. Thanks for not flamin' me!!!!!!!!!!

Don't torment me with your evil ways by saying my artworks legs are too long!! Lol! I'm just kidding, thanx for the tip. Next time I'll try not to make them soooo long.

i never said that she wasnt Good enough.

Hey. I just wanted to let you know that I finally got my story back up and was able to post chapters 1 through 5. Just to let you know. ^^; Sorry for the long wait. ^^;;

Seifer-sama

don't worry, it was really well appreciated. Gah, so many homeworks and project assignments. I haven't had any time to write the next chappie. (Wendy nearly drove me nuts with her shouts of updating. @-@) hopefully I can get the next one up soon. I'll take you adivce, it really does help

Actually, that was a lot of critism, wasn't it? ^^'' Whoo boy. . .

And lastly, your foreshadowing. You know what it is? I'm pretty sure you do, but just in case, foreshadowing is like giving the reader a hint of what's happening next. I noticed (especially in chapter 11), that you completely stopped the story to tell people of a character that wasn't in the little battle at all. That is ineffective because 1) it seems very unprofessional, 2) it takes the moment away for the reader, and 3) you can easily use the method of foreshadowing to tell the readers what to prepare for. Please please please! I find that very annoying as a reader, and you do have some wonderful potential!

I like the story anyway, it has a great concept. But don't worry about all this; not many people on this site are acquainted with the basic writing skills. How should I know? Because that's how I started like. That's why I'm kinda embarrassed about my very first fanfic, the Millennium Ritual. It's so bad. . . --''

Thanks for listening!

Hey Rita. Sorry for not showing up for awhile. Anyway, I just want to give you some critism about your writing, Divination, since you asked me a LONG time ago to read it. (wrote two comments in there, but was too lazy to write anymore)

Anyway, the very first thing I saw that needed improvement was format and spacing. Spacing spacing spacing. You can't tell where the paragraphs brake off, and that's kind of a number one rule when it comes to writing. You MUST have paragraphs and stuff to show when a thought ends or when it begins.

Two, grammer. The concept of your story is very nice, and it is obvious that you have some excellent ideas, but you need to learn the basic ways of writing dialogue, author's craft, foreshadowing, and so on. These are basic tools that are needed to become an exceptional writer. how do I know? Because I'm working on those tools right now.


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yo um rita silentsoul i put a person in kingdom hearts -darkness falls im jus lettin ya know so the wait can be shorter

Hi ^^ i really love your inuyasha pic.i would comment on more pics but i am in school right now. if you want you can check out my gallery if you like.

Hi this is judgementblade0 answering to your question. I used copic sketch markers to color my picture of the angel and unicorn. In the picture with the vampire feeding I used a colorless blender (also a copic marker) to do the woman's skin. I have a question. I'm a little obsesed with finding great anime wallpaper sites. So could you please tell me where you found that picture in your profil "Forsaken Angel"

Well, I'm taking video game designing classes sooo...yeah, that helped. And your donut thing wasn't annoying Cara. IT was like you trademark. And thanks everyone. Hey Maylia, do you still have that lists of names for the characters in the game I gave you. I lost mine T-T If you have it can you email it back to me?

Hello it's me. Hiroshima recently sent me an e-mail about how annoying it was that I did my doughtnut thing so I'm stopping all together. Sorry if it annoyed you or anything. Cara

please don't feel you are obligated to draw my request that would make me feel so terrible if you drew it because you thought you had to

i already told you that i wanted a voice... but i wanna know how are you doing this game???

Just wondering, but what ethnicity are you? ^^

Hi. It's me I wanted to say hi and ask how you're doing? Also I didn't know if you knew this site ( albinoblacksheep.com ) but it has some funny/interesting videos. Here are a few links to ones I like albinoblacksheep.com/flash/guineapig.php albinoblacksheep.com/flash/badgers.php albinoblacksheep.com/flash/ddautta.php albinoblacksheep.com/flash/kittycat.php I hope you like them. ^^

-waves- Konichi wa, Soul-chan!! -huggles- I'm doing fine - I got my comp up and running again! ^_^ -cheers happily- What about you?

Eek, what's wrong with your comp? Seems that we're both having the same problem, lol. ^_^;

Actually, I'm twelve. I started Kindergarten late, but skipped 2nd and 5th grade.

Hiiiiii!!!!!!!! ^^ The reason you can't find the post piccie, is because I haven't posted it yet. ^^' Only because I'm having trouble scanning it. You see, I drew the original first 3 pages in my sketchbook, and I can't seem to scan it, without a lot of the picture being cut off. But I'll work on it, and it ought to be up in about 2-3 days. BTW, on the forums, you said you skipped 2 grades and are now in 8th? Does that mean you're 11?

I don't know if someones told you already but Advent Children is the FFVII Spinoff movie coming out soon.

I would've wished to comment more, but I couldn't really. your art is good, so keep drawing!

~(-Talin-)~

Yeah, I do draw stuff other than chibis, but they're waaaaayy out of proportion, I guess I could try again sometime...

thanx for the comment yes i know im desterbing =D

To answer you question on my picture of Shadow link, yes he is my version of the one from Ocarina of time. Thanks for the comment!

~(-Talin-)~