Chapter 1 - Darling
Submitted June 25, 2009 Updated March 12, 2011 Status Incomplete | :D hellooooooo i feel like making more poems cause i'm bored.
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Chapter 1 - Darling
Chapter 1 - Darling
i lay here calling out to you
yes i know we've been in this same situation before
many times we've been like this
i'm bleeding your love out
if there was any to begin with i'm not sure
darling, your slowly losing me
i know i lost you long ago
or more so never had you to begin with.
darling, will you still come to me when i call out your name?
yes i know we've been in this same situation before
many times we've been like this
i'm bleeding your love out
if there was any to begin with i'm not sure
darling, your slowly losing me
i know i lost you long ago
or more so never had you to begin with.
darling, will you still come to me when i call out your name?
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power9x on July 5, 2009, 2:35:25 AM
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I like the overall theme of it, but the rythmic flow is really off. It seems more like speech than poem. Other than that, pretty good.LoveYouHateMe on June 25, 2009, 2:00:11 AM
This is good.^^
sad,but still beautiful.