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Transgressions Upon the Soul

This poem, I rather like. I like how it worked out. The rhyming all worked out well, and I like my use of vocabulary. ^_^ Yay. I'm proud of it.



Chapter 1 - Transgressions Upon the Soul
Submitted: September 10, 2006 • Updated: September 10, 2006
Word count: 239 • Size: 1k • Comments: 2 • views: 133


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FrenchSpeakingLightBulbz on September 12, 2006, 9:46:50 AM

FrenchSpeakingLightBulbz on (Chapter: 1)
FrenchSpeakingLightBulbzAmazing work! I love how you worded everything and the feeling the poem gets across. Great description and detail; I especially love this whole part:

Vague, the girl’s ethereal and pretty dreams,
Closer to the reality she wants than it seems
Tangled like yarn on so many skeins
Ephemeral, lost on morning’s light, like so many other things

feari on September 13, 2006, 1:03:03 PM

feari on (Chapter: 1)
feariThank you so much! I'm really flattered. ^_^ I'm glad you like it.