hey thats a good poem..and its true...i like
to write in the spur of the moment
too...!!...most of my poems i
write pretty quick 2....hope 2c
more !!...great job!
~Gabby

If you'd work longer on this it would have been better. It looks as though you focused to much on ryhming. Not all poems have to ryhme (SP? T.T) Don't try so hard to make it ryhme, try a little harder to get more emotions into it. I can't wait for another one of your poems! Keep posting ^.^

hey i think u should of got more comments i liked it so those other people dont know what there not commenting about:) ^6^ ^.^ ^@^

K this really appeared weird so sorry if it looks funny theres no rite spacing ^?^