omfg GREAT WORK?!??! WTF?!?! THIS SUCKS! I WRITE STORIES A HUNDRED TIMES LONGER THAN THIS PIECE OF CRAP AND I'M STILL NOT SATISFIED! WHAT ARE YOU, FIVE YEARS OLD?!
Hee hee, that was neat. ^_^ I have no advice for you, except the stuff that I talked about in my comment on your other story. ^_^ Keep up the great work!