Vincent's Daughter by seras_familiar

Chapters

1 - Proluge - Submitted 2005-07-08 Updated: 2005-07-08 - 88 views, 318 words, 1k
2 - Chapter 1 - Submitted 2005-07-08 Updated: 2005-07-08 - 81 views, 605 words, 3k
3 - Chapter 2 - Submitted 2005-07-08 Updated: 2005-07-08 - 69 views, 1166 words, 6k
4 - Kiro - Submitted 2005-07-20 Updated: 2005-07-20 - 60 views, 696 words, 4k
5 - 5 - Submitted 2006-08-27 Updated: 2006-08-27 - 67 views, 714 words, 4k
6 - 6 - Submitted 2006-08-27 Updated: 2006-08-27 - 64 views, 1773 words, 9k
7 - 7 - Submitted 2006-08-27 Updated: 2006-08-27 - 67 views, 1177 words, 6k
8 - 8 - Submitted 2006-08-29 Updated: 2006-08-29 - 70 views, 1115 words, 5k
9 - 9 - Submitted 2006-09-02 Updated: 2006-09-02 - 58 views, 800 words, 4k
10 - 10 - Submitted 2006-09-02 Updated: 2006-09-02 - 62 views, 918 words, 4k
11 - 11 - Submitted 2006-09-02 Updated: 2006-09-02 - 72 views, 548 words, 2k

20 Comments (Most recent 10). Show All

Jul 10, 2007 03:36 PM by: aeris7dragon chapter 0

WRITE ANOTHER! IM GETTING BORED HERE! THERE'S NOTHING TO DO BUT READ! MY GRANDMA DOESNT HAVE A PS!

May 28, 2007 12:05 AM by: aeris7dragon chapter 0

Hey! That was the best fanfic story I've ever read! Seriously! You should write another story. You write better than me, & I'm an English freak!

Sep 3, 2006 01:57 PM by: waterwolf29 chapter 11

Oh...PLEASE WRITE MORE!!!!!
Uh, when you get more time!

Sep 3, 2006 01:48 PM by: waterwolf29 chapter 10

Me likey ^-^.

Sep 3, 2006 01:40 PM by: waterwolf29 chapter 9

Keep going at it!

Aug 31, 2006 07:06 AM by: waterwolf29 chapter 8

Keep going!

Aug 27, 2006 04:47 PM by: waterwolf29 chapter 7

OH PLEASE WRITE MORE TOMMROW
OR WHEN YOU CAN WRITE MORE!
Because if you put to much
data on here you can't put it
on untill 1:00AM.

Aug 27, 2006 11:33 AM by: waterwolf29 chapter 4

*zombie me* U MUST WRITE MORE!

Aug 27, 2006 11:22 AM by: waterwolf29 chapter 3

No it's, OW, good.
(sorry I'm having chest pains)

Aug 27, 2006 11:13 AM by: waterwolf29 chapter 2

What happened to Yuffie?
Oh wait I'll read the next
chapter!

Jul 27, 2006 08:56 PM by: Vincent11 chapter 3

poorly writen you were awsome i love it

Jul 27, 2006 08:45 PM by: Vincent11 chapter 2

I love it the way you end it makes the reader want more your great!

Jan 12, 2006 11:05 AM by: VincentValentine13 chapter 4

Short but bitter-sweet. Kinda non-descriptive, and I think that when a person is wracked with pain, the last thought on their mind is whether a person is hot or not....sorry, just saying it.

Jan 12, 2006 11:02 AM by: VincentValentine13 chapter 3

Kinda short, but not too bad. Just a few descriptive and grammatical issues, just the normal stuff all us writers suffer from.

Jan 12, 2006 10:55 AM by: VincentValentine13 chapter 2

Well, I'll ignore the Yuffietine factor, but I will say something.
At the beginning of this chapter, you wrote, "Cold, Dark, This would describe....etc." Now, the cold dark part was okay, but you probably couldv'e worded that next sentence, that was kinda....hmm, I don't know....not right?
Anyway, Vincent's portrayel is good, but maybe you could be a bit more descriptive in your writing. Hope this helps you, and come point out my mistakes on my story too, please!

Dec 18, 2005 07:52 AM by: Zell11 chapter 4

Omg. This is so good.Plz write more.

Zell11 =^-^=

Aug 22, 2005 02:03 PM by: Kupo chapter 4

wtf? why haven't i commented on ths!!! i've seen it before and i'm pretty sure it's on my favs (and if it's not it should be) so i have no idea why i haven't commented on it! anyway great job! this story is super awsomeness! that leon was clouds son was almost painfully obvious but maybe it was supposed to be? i was just coming here anyway to see if you'd added any chapters but no *sniffles* PLEASE WRITE MORE!

Jul 30, 2005 02:13 PM by: KYOSCHIC chapter 4

I LIKE IT!!!!!!!!! WRITE MORE PLEASE!!!!!!!!!

Jul 12, 2005 03:53 PM by: Serenity89 chapter 3

Ooh, Keep It Up ^_^

Jul 9, 2005 02:24 PM by: orangegirl chapter 3

excellent! i cant wait to read the next chapter!