I am NOT better at writing than you!!! Anyone who reads this *points to the story* can say so!!! YOU are the wrong one, my dear.
 
Oh yeah, but I do have a love of imagery XD I add it in everywhere

The plotline gets worse, oh and when I read your profile it gave me the idea to make you how you are when you are older... like the reasons. XD The reason for you being afraid of water comes later.. but now she thinks you're dead, sucker.

Hhhmmm... I think that my style has improved. I read some of my fruits basket story and nearly died the other day XD. and books do influence me loads.. it's like "oooh, that's a great way of putting it!" *nabs idea*
 
please write more of this/ hp!!! or else Choppy will eat you

I LOVE YOU.........please write more
this is gooooooood story
sad but cool

Tomoki sounds cute.......tis good story

ok, so you wanted me to leave a long comment, eh?

well, for a start Echospheramy's name is so long and hard to pronounce. heh. but it is a good story.

well, i like it.

a bit dark, but not depressing.

grrr...will write more later.

YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY! IT IS SO GOOD! I can't leave a long comment as have to go to maths in a tic, but it was AMAZING!!!!! Soooooooooooooo cool!!!! Okies Doofus, see you later. Great chapter, I demand you write more as soon as you get home!!! Okies doof, bye lol

No... The longer comment the better x3

I love recieving long comments.

tyres bon melly....and ani's comment is WAY TOO LONG...anyway....its very good. and you better write mor.e and you are not shitty at writing. anyhow. very good

whatto

pip-pip

AAAAAAAAAAAAYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

I LOVE IT THAT CHAOTER WAS SO GOOD X3 AAYAA!!

aaaaw the beginning was so sad ;____; awaaaa. *sniff*

im in the pc room right now... and miss ellis is in here. and i am wearing mufti and im not supposed to >___> and then there are the evil keyboards that wont let me type ANYTHING properly and is EVIL and i dobnt like it!! *throws gnomes at keyboard* anyways lalalaaaa we are about to go to japanese and make ONIGIRI!!! AAAAAAYAAAAA!! *drools*

Kyou: ARGH! STOP THAT IT IS GROSS!!

Ritsu: *dutifully starts mopping it up (looking very cute in maynard school uniform)* lalalaaaaa i shall do it for you...

why thankees... i bet that sophie is in the classroom right now, complaininbg that i am not there and that we neede to start walking.

ARGH i am actually watching manning read this right now and i want to tell you that I FINISHED FIRST!! i just am commenting more... hahaaaa.

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH I

HATE

THESE KEYBOARDS!! THEY ARE THE MOST EVIL THINGS INJ EXISTANCE!!

grek there are loads of evil kids allk around me playing on that stupid typing game and the nkiise is so annoying. they are all looking at me >__> and also we have PARENTS EVEING which i dont want to go to. if dad makes a joke he shall lose his head. grr..

anyway WOW SO GOOOD!! AND AAYAAA ITS FAWN!! YAYAYAYAYAYAAAAA she is so cool.. as long as you dont mention her full name (evil evil)

and his mother is EVIL and STUPID! argh..

wait a sec last tiume that i left a comment this long it would post it all so i had better post.

thats really good...i really like it. Will you write more soon....pwease....pwease....pwease.!?!?!?!?!

;___; MEL! THAT IS SOOOO AMAZING! YOU ARE SO AMAZING AT WRITING! NEVER SAY YOU ARE BAD AT WRITING STORIES AGAIN!

Waa! I love it so much! I am going to be as obsessed about this as you are about my story. So there! I will leave as long comments as I can too, just to annoy you!

Anyway, it is soooooooooooooooo good! And so sad! Why did they kill him! I thought everybody liked him! Waaaaaa ;___; Sooooo sad.

You HAVE to write more! It is so good! Please please please please please please please write more soon! Otherwise I will get story deprival! So, yeah, write some more soon! Pleeease *begs* *worships* *builds a shrine to you* *builds a temple to you*

AAAGAFSAAAGAAAH IM SOOO BORED AND I WANT TO READ SOMETHING SO I HAD TO RESOST TO READING THIS FOR THE THIRD TIME SINCE YOU PUT IT UP 15 MINS AGO

BUT AYAYAYAYAYAYAAAAAAA!!! SOO GOOD

so basically tis not crap *favs*

signed:
annie (#1 fan of all that is kyou, inuyasha or drawn/ written by you)

and ritsu souma (im sooorry)

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAW THATS SO GOOD ;_____;

awaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa

*drags ritsu out to read story* ritchan-san read!
ritsu: er.. *reads bit about humans* IM SOO SOORRY AT THE DEVISTATION THAT MY RACE HAS CAUSED IM SOO SOOO SOORRY I SHALL NOT BURNED YOU ANY LONGER IM SO SORRY *jumps out window*

*grabs ritsu and ties him to chair* yayayayaaaaa moooore moooore and no its not too short. reminds me of the animatrix at the beginning which is so cool ^^

but waaaaaaa the ending is sooo sad awaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa *joins ritsu*

*singsong voices* WE ARE SOO SORRY XD