O_O HOLY CRUD!!!!!!! AWSOME!!!!!!!!UR AWSOME AT WRITTING! -is coming form a person that sucks herself and wouldnt no good writting if it slapped her in the butt- XD AWSOME!PURE AWSOME!
u know thats what i thought. the detail was to little, i wanted to keep it under 13000 words lol. i planned a sequel, but lacked the time, plus i have no clue how those IBM's got there, lol, and thanx again! GLAD U LOVED IT! and wow, m honored dreamofire! u commented on me, yay!
Wow. I loved it. The charcters, the gore, ext. BUT I have a few construsctive comments. First, sry, but I didn't understand the IBM's and stuff. It confused me^_^ Second, It needs more detail(makes the story longer! ^_^) and thts all. If you don't want to take my advise then thts alright. again I loved it. Keep it up.
Hey thats a really cool story Powtaz i like it a lot. I rarely take time to read peoples stories but i thourughly enjoyed that thanks for the experience.