Wow, I don't know much about your poetry writing yet but (please don't be mad, I'm really not trying to be rude) it's seems like you just started out and still getting the jiff of it.
I'm no expert either but haha, sorry.
But it's a lovely poem and I did get touched in the heart, haha.
Psh, anything Kingdom Hearts, expecally when it's a love thing, gets me in the heart. It's so sad! ;.;
Why would they make a game so sad yet so good! >.< XD