I want MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOORE! It's really good! Please?????

OMG! A fight with Neji?!?! And she's not even a genin!

AAAWH! Ikkle cute Naruto all upset 'cause he failed to graduate! Loving it so far!

-ck))

Oki-day, critique time! <--will try to make this as well-rounded as she can >_<
 
Get the feeling it's getting a little predictable? (execpt for the orange part XD). And I see a lack of details here. There's a little too much dialouge, you can't really picture much, can you? Well, the dialouge's okay, it's just that there's not enough detail to go with what they're saying. Like, when Gai first appears, all you say about what he's doing is frowning. What pose is he assuming? Why did he frown? Did he come up expecting peace and smiling, all of a sudden his smile fades and turns into a frown?
 
Your sentence structure could be varied a little more. For most of the dialouge, you just had them say the words and then put action after them. Putting the action before or even in the middle of a longer sentence would be great. Remember to vary the structure.
 
The story's not bad -- I can tell you that -- I'm enjoying it so far, it's just that there's little lack of action to go along with they character's words. Maybe that's why you haven't gotten many people reading it. When people read a story they want to have a picture painted for them, not have to guess what they author's meaning to show them. (I don't read much on here because of that reason) Putting more action with it all would make it much more enjoyable^^
 
Lol, I never give comments this long on artwork...I'm not very good with crit'ing art, but I can tell pretty much what's wrong with stories.

One thing I don't get: In the time it took for Tenten to turn around, Gai was already displeased with the fact that they'd ceased training...I suppose.....I dunno: can't explain /\_/\'

Well, don't tell me! Put it in your story! x3
That's what I mean, explain what exactly happened, 'cause how's anyone supposed to know that it took Tenten time to turn around unless you say sumthin' about it?

................? i dunno! /\_/\'

Can't you take a hint? -_-'

Yeesss, I dunno how to put it though! I thought it was obvious enough -_-''' "i dunno"

Well, then...either I wasn't paying attention, or it wasn't obvious enough.
lol, I just noticed, you misspelled "Clarinet" in the first chapter title.

those chapters suck -_- ah~ whatevaa lol, go to Hogwarts

Gah, I gotta leave any minute soon to baby-sit soon...

S'okay, I'm gonna exit and set up Haley's Preschool game ^^ lol, fun fun fun!

Yeah- I'm no writer /\_/\' never really have been

* Screams* HOW DARE YOU TURN NEJI ORANGE!!!!! * bonks Nikora on the head* He's apart of one of the repectable clans in the hidden leaf village. He doens't need to be walking around ORANGE!!!

Lol, thanks for reading /\___/\ <3

Interesting

Thank you    ?

XD love it!!!! Can't wait for more!! ^^

lol, it's awesome- i know *bow* *bow*

*jabs side w/ finger* now go read my stories! *points to link on profile*

Ughhh- fanfiction is blocked....i'll ask my mum....

Ugh- I don't like this chapter -_-

Very Nice, great work once again. ^_^ Can't wait for more.
Kuwaii!!!

Thanks /\_/\ (gah- so happy that sum ppl are reading it!) <3

You did a really great job with the description!

thanks /\_/\

The fight wasn't very long... I'm disappointed....:(
 
Oh, well, AND YET ANOTHER CLIFF-HANGER!!!
are you trying to make me go mad!
 
Anyways me likes...

Awww- don't be disappionted ;3 beliiiiieeeve me, DON'T be disappointed mufufufufufufu

Bleh- the first chapter isn't very good at all, and neither is the second. But it's gets better, I swear /._.\

Continue!!!!
I'm dying!
Continue!
Don't torture me with cliff-hangers!!!
--love it! =D

sa'bout time!! >=D

^^ kuwl! I like it!

dum-dum-dum-dummmm!!!

Cute! Keep going!

/\_/\ thanks!