The Story Of Heroes
Submitted November 30, 2007 Updated April 10, 2010 Status Complete | my old story. This is where it was when I started on it A WHILE AGO. Please go to my redone version if you want tobegin it with QUALITY. If not, stay here and enjoy the crap. REDONE VERSION: http://www.fanart-central.net/story-56710.html
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Fantasy |
Chapters
Chapter 0 - READ THIS FIRST!!!
Submitted: February 15, 2010 • Updated: February 15, 2010
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Chapter 1 - The beginning of their adventure...
Submitted: November 30, 2007 • Updated: March 2, 2009
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Chapter 2 - the beginning of their new lives...
Submitted: December 1, 2007 • Updated: March 2, 2009
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Chapter 3 - Their meeting
Submitted: July 19, 2008 • Updated: March 2, 2009
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Chapter 4 - A Strange Kid
Submitted: July 20, 2008 • Updated: March 2, 2009
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Chapter 5 - A first Conflict
Submitted: July 21, 2008 • Updated: March 2, 2009
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Chapter 6 - All Collide
Submitted: July 22, 2008 • Updated: March 2, 2009
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Chapter 7 - An Interesting Guest
Submitted: July 23, 2008 • Updated: July 25, 2008
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Chapter 8 - Discussion
Submitted: July 25, 2008 • Updated: July 25, 2008
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Chapter 9 - Agent X and Bull's Story
Submitted: July 27, 2008 • Updated: July 27, 2008
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Chapter 10 - IFRIT Part 1
Submitted: July 28, 2008 • Updated: August 19, 2008
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Chapter 11 - IFRIT Part 2
Submitted: July 28, 2008 • Updated: July 28, 2008
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Chapter 12 - Agent Y
Submitted: July 28, 2008 • Updated: August 8, 2008
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Chapter 13 - Public Service Announcement
Submitted: July 30, 2008 • Updated: August 8, 2008
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Chapter 14 - Part 2:Recap
Submitted: August 7, 2008 • Updated: August 8, 2008
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Chapter 15 - Weaknesses
Submitted: August 8, 2008 • Updated: August 9, 2008
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Chapter 16 - May's Experience
Submitted: August 9, 2008 • Updated: August 11, 2008
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Chapter 17 - Angel
Submitted: August 9, 2008 • Updated: August 9, 2008
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Chapter 18 - Our Fire Burns
Submitted: August 10, 2008 • Updated: December 21, 2008
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Chapter 19 - Bio Saves The Day
Submitted: August 11, 2008 • Updated: August 11, 2008
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Chapter 20 - Nightmares/Transformation
Submitted: August 11, 2008 • Updated: September 19, 2008
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Chapter 21 - Tag Team Part 1
Submitted: August 12, 2008 • Updated: August 13, 2008
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Chapter 22 - Tag Team Part 2
Submitted: August 14, 2008 • Updated: August 15, 2008
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Chapter 23 - Missing chapter, Info
Submitted: December 7, 2008 • Updated: December 21, 2008
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Chapter 24 - Mind Over Matter Part 1
Submitted: September 9, 2008 • Updated: September 9, 2008
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Chapter 25 - Mind Over Matter Part 2
Submitted: September 11, 2008 • Updated: September 13, 2008
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Chapter 26 - Mind Over Matter Part 3
Submitted: September 13, 2008 • Updated: November 7, 2008
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Chapter 27 - Old Friends
Submitted: November 4, 2008 • Updated: November 4, 2008
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Chapter 28 - Breaking Bonds
Submitted: November 13, 2008 • Updated: November 13, 2008
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Chapter 29 - Forgotten Memories
Submitted: November 16, 2008 • Updated: November 16, 2008
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Chapter 30 - An Android's Lament
Submitted: November 26, 2008 • Updated: November 27, 2008
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Chapter 31 - Part 3: Old Surroundings
Submitted: December 31, 2008 • Updated: December 31, 2008
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Chapter 32 - A Repressed Disaster
Submitted: January 3, 2009 • Updated: January 4, 2009
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Chapter 33 - May And Tank's Spiritual Journeys
Submitted: January 7, 2009 • Updated: January 7, 2009
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Chapter 34 - Dark Angel
Submitted: January 10, 2009 • Updated: February 6, 2009
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Chapter 35 - Power Struggle
Submitted: January 11, 2009 • Updated: February 6, 2009
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Chapter 36 - Tank: Fully Loaded
Submitted: January 16, 2009 • Updated: January 16, 2009
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Chapter 37 - The Agent's Prophecy
Submitted: January 17, 2009 • Updated: February 6, 2009
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Chapter 38 - The Final Five
Submitted: January 19, 2009 • Updated: February 7, 2009
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Chapter 39 - Agent A's Mysteries
Submitted: January 31, 2009 • Updated: February 7, 2009
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Chapter 40 - Rebelling Agents
Submitted: February 6, 2009 • Updated: February 7, 2009
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Chapter 41 - Agent Y's Rampage
Submitted: March 1, 2009 • Updated: March 2, 2009
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Chapter 42 - Sibling Rivalry
Submitted: March 2, 2009 • Updated: March 27, 2009
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Chapter 43 - Preparations
Submitted: March 28, 2009 • Updated: March 28, 2009
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Chapter 44 - Working Together
Submitted: April 4, 2009 • Updated: April 13, 2009
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Chapter 45 - The Ultimate Weapon
Submitted: April 13, 2009 • Updated: April 13, 2009
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Chapter 46 - A Chance Meeting
Submitted: April 28, 2009 • Updated: May 16, 2009
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Chapter 47 - Your Responsibility
Submitted: May 16, 2009 • Updated: May 25, 2009
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Chapter 48 - Unexpected Surprises
Submitted: May 30, 2009 • Updated: May 30, 2009
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Chapter 49 - The Beginning of The End
Submitted: June 15, 2009 • Updated: June 15, 2009
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Chapter 50 - The Story Ends And It Begins
Submitted: July 5, 2009 • Updated: April 10, 2010
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SilverGirl13 on November 15, 2009, 9:12:16 AM
I havent had a computer since early summer... im at my freinds using her's I FINALLY FINISHED READING YOUR STORY!!!! i love it... but majorly clif hanger ending dude... GAH! CLIFHANGERS! UGH!overlordlaharl on November 19, 2009, 12:39:55 PM
so are you gonna read the redone version I'm workin' on?power9x on July 5, 2009, 2:18:41 AM
Prototype? Good. If this continues, it'd be a mess.A few more comments:
Glad there's atleast spacing between dialogue, but due to no end bits and also no seperations in character (really one dimentional characters), it all muddles together anyways. Can you describe these characters in more than "that's the one with the spike launching ability". Also, the beginning is WTF maximus. I'm sure it'll have relevance later, but for the moment, it's needless.
power9x on July 5, 2009, 2:13:27 AM
Ok, I'll try and be constructive, but there's alot that's improvable:Positives:
A standard super group story would work out well, especially for an episodic nature. Spelling is good.
Negatives:
First of all, the plot's beyond conveluted. WHO THE frack BUILDS A PLAYGROUND NEXT TO A NUCLEAR WASTE SITE! WHAT KIND OF KIDS JUST RUN OUT AND SAY: "Gee, let's go get the ball out of the stuff that is likely to kill us!". If your ridiculous level exceeds a silver age comic, then you've got problems. Also, the characters aren't fleshed out in the slightest. They need to be less generic. And finally, the formating needs work. It's readable, but needs improvement.The grammar too.
I'll probably nitpick at the plot more as I go along, but so far, there's problems. I congradulate you on the length, which is rare for things here, but if it's like this, 1000 mindfracks are bound to happen. 1 out of 5 (Bad, but salvageable)
SilverGirl13 on April 28, 2009, 2:56:56 AM
I feel sorry for Grimm.....SilverGirl13 on April 21, 2009, 1:21:13 AM
Question #1Bull.... I think. It may have been She-Devil, but i think it was Bull.
Question #2
Bond, James Bond
Question #3
God gave them to her because she asked him for them!
Question #4
X, A, Christina(C), and A
Question #5
To set arrmageddon into motion.
SilverGirl13 on March 28, 2009, 4:44:40 AM
Raven seems cool! IFRIT's, i mean Inferno's, real name is james Bond... That hilarious!SilverGirl13 on March 2, 2009, 9:26:26 AM
Huh..... that will be an interesting thing to think about tonight when i cannot fall asleep.... at any rate, great chapter^^*P.S. Keep at it! this is a great story, and i would hate for it not to be finished!
SilverGirl13 on March 2, 2009, 12:20:01 AM
definatly interesting, i like this chapter! lots of fighting^^*SilverGirl13 on February 10, 2009, 6:25:11 AM
I understand, some characters have to die. When I kill off a character in my comic book I always feel guilty. But someone has to do it.Great chapter by the way^^*