This is just something I thought I'd work on when I'm not drawing. Even so, I'd still like your opinion and critisism. Also, this story will involve different anime, videogames, and even a few books.
Oh, Just to let you guys know, I'm using the japanese name for Ms. Golden Week, (whose english name was Ms. April Fools Day.) Another thing, yes Luffy and crew DID fight Mr. 3 and Ms. Golden Week before, but the american dub just decided for some lack-of-logic reason to skip the arc dealing with these two.
Interesting time distortion, this could be an excellent story. Good work. lol, my "The Dire Project" has fell stagnant, remember, if you dont work on it much you seem to lose interest.
Nice. Definitely potential for an interesting story!
...um...as for criticism...you seem to be having some trouble with grammar and consistency with present v. past tense. You may want to check your word choice too. But good job, otherwise. :P
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Submitted: 2008-01-31, Updated: 2008-02-09,
Chapters: 3, Size: 17K,
Words: 3686, Comments: 8,
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