Swe-et! XD

no problem! :D

yay! she gets to marry Pip. =)

I wodner what the next challenge will be?

Aw! Amira is in lvoe with a commoner! taht's awesome! I wonder what will happen with that?

new characters. =) fluffy sounds cute.

I'll be looking for the picture, then. =)

this is good so far. =) for soem reason the action seems a little rushed, but maybe it's just me. lol. Well, on to the next chapter!

Ok i checked it out and there could be some improveing done here first, i recomend you should use chapter's and give the chapter's name's so people can predict (geuss) what might happen in the next chapter. Also i suggest useing stronger vocabulary example: (you don't mind me quoteing some things and rearangeing some scentences right?) "She ran to it with haste as her as fast as her weary leg's could carry her. She had finaly reached it sounded the alarm." see, this would make it sound more intresting. also when i saw “Well what are you standing around for?!?! It best be that we set up camp," you don't need a bunch of "?!?!" all you need is "?" he is asking why she's standing around right? also the i notice this quite a few times in your story but, there is no need for the "comma" at the end of when some one speaks cause it wouldn't make much sense to put it there if you think about it. The "comma" is ment to give your story more of an edge (if you now what i mean) like here's an example: The cold, and bloody war has finally come to an end. All had parished but, Elga she was the only on left that had survied the war. did you see how the "comma" made it a litle more exciting cause you don't know what could happen! the last thing i see you should do is put more descripition in your story, if it has more detail it will soud much better and more exciting, plus you can actullay get an image of what the character's enviorment is like and all that. Use more detail for not just the setting but for the character's too. What do they look like? personality? etc. all that and don't use suddenly at the end to much switch it around with different words every now and then. welp thats it.

its a good storyline though. it just need's some tweaking.

your welcome^^

cool! ^^

so adventurous..XD and Amira has a secret admirer ? :O

cool, a new character arrives..:)

nice chapter..:P

cool was it a dream dun dun dun^^

the fairy party cuse she woke up on the cart right after the fairy party part^^

oh okay^^

cute^^

np^^

Nothing like swinging on snakes disguised as vines to work up an appetite for such a healthy meal, lol! Great job!

Ah man, cliffhanger! lol, nice work!

Nice! Awesome opening!

awsome as. i love the marshmellows... and the fairies

no probs

oh oh fluffy is so cool lol

awsome as, i like alexandra's charactor

Pretty awesome ideas! I can see potential in this, yet it's not all that detailed. If you included more details about her journey and about the pirates and every other person it would be much better and longer. Make sure to proofread for mistakes. ^^

Um, hm. ^^ You're welcome!

This is so sweet! ^-^ write more!

no prob!

^w^

Awesome I can't wait to read more. This is very interesting ^_^

Wow You have a really good imagination!

LOL

cool^^

you're welcome

Yay i made a Chibi Sally Finkelstein comic two versions one is just colored more than the other they are on funart first

so mysterious! it's so cool! ^-^ write more soon!

no prob! i luv it!

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WOw that so so good Adds to *faves* ^_^

OOOOOOOOOOH! what happened?!

awesome mez addz to favs asap