Um, I'm not sure why I'm really commenting, but uh, and don't take this rudely, but it needs some more...er structure? When a poem's just in one big paragraph, it's hard to read and understand. Not to mention it makes you look like an beginner. Not to mention you stole two lines from songs. Am I blind or can I see from Iron Man, Black Sabbath. ANd Kill me while I kiss the sky, is similar to Scuse me while I kiss the sky from Jimmy Hendrix. Now, it's not always bad to take some lines, but you have to give some credit to the originals.
AWWWWWWWWW OMG IM SO SORRY!!!!! ....HEY U DONT HAVE TO BE SO MEAN ABOUT IT xSlipnotMunkEEx geeze ....*huggles* im sorry i have not commented in like forever but i been in a depressed mood...sorry *hugz again* u deserve better than her anyway ^^ i hope u feel better if u need to talk to somone im here ^^
....WAH!!!!!!!!!! Reminds me of what my b/f did to me!! Left me for another girl after telling me he loved me!!!! :( WAHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!! *runs in couner crying....*
Hmmm. I was thinking about what you said when we broke up... and I'm gonna be a dog about this to.... Go read all the fucking poems you wrote when I broke up with you for Nick! Now think about how many poems I wrote.. :cough cough cough:: ZIP! You fucker!! LOOK AT WHOS GETTING OVER SOMEONE NOW!
This is awesome. Why did she dump the God of Anarchy? Evil girl.... eeevvillll.... lemme at her with my bike pump. I break her nose off. XP lol. *favorites*