I really like it :)

Just one thing. Could you italicize the original lyrics so people who don't know the song (like me) can tell who wrote what?

Okays ^^ Thank you for your comment, I'll fix that immediately.

Ah, much better.

Trying to not sound like I'm complaining and relate to the reader, will somebody let me know how I'm kinda doing so far? ^^ Thanks a bunch.

This is beautifully written, i can feel the depth of the emotion which gets emphesised at the end with the song lyrics
i thing you should write more pieces like this

And I'm think of other songs to do... Originally I was contemplating if I should put 2 together but that'lll probably be too much. ^__^ thanks again btw.

Wow O.o thank you so much. I'm just kinda sketch out a little bit were things should go, probably change the order and add a couple ideas and expand my description ^^ thank you again though for your comment. I'll let you know when it is complete ^____^