o.O I couldn't read it properly.
Make the lines of your poem seperate to each other, and then I'll marvel at your work ;)

(if you don't understand, e.g.

You give me reasons to cry,
Bit you always make me smile,
You tell me I should try,)

Awwww!! I love this! It is sooo sweet! The rhymes are great. *favs*

nice poem!
Like thr ryhm

I write poems like that too!

Hmm.. but if u really wanna twist a persons imagination u shud use words that can be felt,seen,smell and etc. that way a person cud really picture ur poem out.Like love for example ur just reading it nothing really pops out of a persons brain ^^

My english teacher made us attend a 3 day seminar on how to write a poem. That was the main idea i think during the seminar ever since then i did really improve ^^ sure he commented my poems in a nasty way but it sure helped me realize my mistakes.

hoped it help!

Oh and please use stanzas ^^ please and thank u ^^

Woooooooooow.......

Wow that's just perfect!
*Fave*

good good good good good good good good good!!!!!!!!!!i love it!!!!!especially about the stars. it's sooo cute!

That's a really good poem^^ *favs*

*sniffle* ;_; How beatiful! T_T I luff this, just one constructive critisism;
add comas between "thoughts" Example;
"You give me reasons to cry, But you always make me smile," That way it's easier to read^^

*faves* you're so good^^ nice and Melancholic...

Very cute. ^_^

I'm not flaming you, but there are a couple lines where the rythym gets a bit thrown off. Umm... "That you'll be better than me", "But all I can do is sleep", and "I hope you're glad".

It's really nothing big, and I know that not all of the lines are the same length, I just thought I'd point those out.

I like it, though. It's sweet, in a sad way. Very nice work! d^_^b

So...beautiful! keep writing poems you have definite talent!!!!!!!!!!!!! ^_~

THAT POEM F**KING SUCKED! No, kidding. That was a truly inspiring poem, and if you really beleive your writing is only "Not Bad", then I want some of what you've been smoking.

I was actually inspired to write this because of two comic book characters from the Blizzard Comics series, The School of Hard Knocks.It's a sad story-but it's funny too.It's a really coolio comedy/fantasy/romance^^
yup, yup

that is......beautiful a wonderful poem!One question,what inspired you?

its so touching......it made me cry......Keep up the good work!

OMG THAT POEM WAS SO F@#%*$ AWESOME i added it to my favorites list on my profile!!!

wow....simply....wow

O.O

AWESOME-NESS!*faves*

thats soooooo beatuful. so romantic and yet soo sad. well done

THIS IS THE GREATEST POEM I EVER HEARD!!

GOOD JHOB! AGAIN!

I usually don't like poems, but this is very nice. Keep up the good work ^_^

good!!! i like it!

holy funnel monkey shoot!
that's like a sonnet. only better!
*favorites*
it is physically impossible not to love this poem!