Demons on the Outside by setokaibaslittlesis

Jul 5, 2008 07:44 PM by: NamidaNara chapter 25

Remember the idea I gave you?

Jun 19, 2008 12:24 AM by: PandaChan21 chapter 25

hey, good job so far! When do kristen and akara show up? I have a pretty funny idea for akara, and a cute bit of fluff for lee and kristen, if you want to know...

Jun 15, 2008 08:45 PM by: NamidaNara chapter 25

Luv it!

I kinda had a cute idea to how Keiko and Nara start to connect, if you wanna hear it...

Jun 15, 2008 02:31 AM by: ladychaos chapter 25

awesome update^^

Jun 14, 2008 10:54 PM by: YuckFou chapter 25

Oooh, nice update! cant wait for more! ^_^

Jun 13, 2008 08:03 AM by: YuckFou chapter 24

Wow, I liked this one! You really know the personallity of my boys...I LOVE IT!

Jun 13, 2008 07:57 AM by: YuckFou chapter 23

Hey! SWEET! You added my SEn-sei! =3

I love Midori...Shes awesome! ^o^
but she dont have a face FULL of pericings, just a nose stud and a stud on her chin. I think she has 3 or 4 pericings in both ears...I dont know.

BUT YAY! lol Tai the @$$ and Jami the golden boy...cute. <3

Jun 7, 2008 03:30 AM by: shinypikachu2608 chapter 11

woah.....

May 30, 2008 02:13 AM by: shinypikachu2608 chapter 2

keeeewl....
hinata shouldnt just bail on keiko like that though.

May 29, 2008 08:12 AM by: ladychaos chapter 24

awesome chapter!
from the sounds of it Itachi is holding something over Selina's head

May 28, 2008 09:52 AM by: FluffysPrincess2968 chapter 23

lmao. xD nice, i love how you made her attitude. :P

May 24, 2008 09:21 AM by: QuestionMarks109 chapter 23

KayEedubleYouEl CHappie. ;] . Ishizu really hit iot off with those studens -_-;. Lawl. AWESOME KERP ERT ERP!

May 24, 2008 07:45 PM by: setokaibaslittlesis chapter 0

Wow. I don't think I understood half of that.

May 31, 2008 01:23 PM by: QuestionMarks109 chapter 0

Lawl. xD

May 23, 2008 07:35 PM by: Nekogal411 chapter 21

^_^ I love this chapter! -Goes off to read more-

May 23, 2008 01:29 PM by: ladychaos chapter 23

awesome chapter
it is intresting what the teachers really think of their students

May 18, 2008 11:35 PM by: PandaChan21 chapter 22

wow...that fit perfectly. It fit us all. I nearly cried...

May 19, 2008 02:25 PM by: setokaibaslittlesis chapter 0

I'm glad you thought so. ^^
I, personally, hated this chapter.

I can't write depressing non-angsty things to save my life. ;_;

May 12, 2008 08:05 PM by: YuckFou chapter 22

Thats REALLY good. Kinda sad at the same time.

Poor old man.

May 9, 2008 09:25 AM by: hflp chapter 22

I liked it. Every story needs a highly emotional scene in it.

May 9, 2008 09:23 AM by: ladychaos chapter 22

it's a very sad chapter, not only did Keiko have to go to the 3rd hokage's funeral but she had to cremate Balki. poor thing, i can understand why she didn't want to talk to anyone

Apr 15, 2008 06:12 PM by: PandaChan21 chapter 21

Ooh, very nice! I loved it, and you always characterize Akara perfectly. Funny fact: Akara is terrified of scorpions.

Apr 12, 2008 07:05 PM by: NamidaNara chapter 21

Awesome!!

But....You still didn't add Nara! Unless I read wrong...

Apr 11, 2008 10:33 PM by: ladychaos chapter 21

awesome chapter, i like the fight scenes
you described Selina's controled demon form very well XD

Apr 11, 2008 08:12 PM by: YuckFou chapter 21

That was so awesome I loved it Straw. But...Who is Midori? All I know who Midori is is Tai, Jami and Selina's Sensei (belongs to hi-lary on dA) whos this one?

Apr 11, 2008 06:26 PM by: hflp chapter 21

Good chapter. Worth the wait. But that ending was so sad. T.T

Apr 11, 2008 07:30 PM by: setokaibaslittlesis chapter 0

0.o
You read my story?

Apr 11, 2008 06:18 PM by: sailoraqua13 chapter 21

Ohhhhhhh...TTTTTTTTTT____TTTTTTTTTTTTTT Please add the next chappie soon! Hey, little fact I forgot to mention about Reiko:
She has a wolf demon they all call the Shiomi inside her. It only comes out when she's really angry and when it comes out of her her chakra turns green.

Mar 17, 2008 07:36 AM by: YuckFou chapter 0

UPDATE!

Apr 11, 2008 06:05 PM by: setokaibaslittlesis chapter 0

I DID!! =D

Mar 9, 2008 10:05 AM by: setokaibaslittlesis chapter 1

ON NOES!
I deleted the GOOD chapter one!
NUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU!

Mar 7, 2008 06:42 PM by: FluffysPrincess2968 chapter 6

nooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!! ;_;

Mar 7, 2008 06:40 PM by: FluffysPrincess2968 chapter 0

Blarg. I r laazzzzzzzyyy. =/ i've just been skimming through this, even if I can read really fast. =/ Which chapter does Ishizu and Murasaki come in? or have I skimmed to much? =/

Feb 9, 2008 06:01 PM by: PandaChan21 chapter 20

Update soon! I'm practically withering away and dying over here!

Feb 8, 2008 05:31 PM by: KionaKina chapter 20

WHAT WILL HAPPEN?!

Feb 6, 2008 02:41 PM by: NamidaNara chapter 0

Amaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaazin!

And yeah! You said Nara would be in this chappie!!!

Feb 5, 2008 09:16 AM by: ladychaos chapter 20

oooooo awesome chapter XD
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can't wait for more

Feb 4, 2008 06:42 PM by: YuckFou chapter 20

YAHOO!
Great chapter! The suspence is killing me! O___O

Feb 3, 2008 11:29 AM by: YuckFou chapter 20

Me too! Its getting good!

Feb 2, 2008 12:01 PM by: KionaKina chapter 20

Tell me when the chappie is done

Jan 30, 2008 09:37 AM by: ladychaos chapter 19

that was an awesome fight with keiko and kaori^^

Jan 23, 2008 04:57 PM by: PandaChan21 chapter 19

Hurry up! I wanna see the next part!

Jan 23, 2008 10:04 AM by: YuckFou chapter 19

=D

Jan 22, 2008 05:48 PM by: KionaKina chapter 19

Darn, Kaori lost. Oh well, it was a really good fight. Let me know when the chapter is done ^_^

Jan 13, 2008 01:05 PM by: ladychaos chapter 18

awesome chapter^^
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one little thing though, Selina dose not have the demon sealed inside her, she was born half a two tailed demon (her dad was a demon her mom was human)

Jan 13, 2008 03:56 PM by: setokaibaslittlesis chapter 0

Ahhh.
>_<
Well, I feel stupid.

I'll fix that as soon as I can. Which will probably be tomorrow when I get home from school.

Jan 15, 2008 01:30 PM by: ladychaos chapter 0

you don't have to re-wright the chapter if you don't wan to^^
in a future chapter you could write it that it was Kaori's idea that she had the demon sealed inside her or something like that

Jan 11, 2008 04:30 PM by: PandaChan21 chapter 18

Best chapter name ever! I like how you portrayed Akara. It sounds just like her!

Jan 13, 2008 03:56 PM by: setokaibaslittlesis chapter 0

YAY!
At least I'm protraying one person correctly!
^^

Jan 11, 2008 04:16 PM by: KionaKina chapter 18

Ok, 1. Brilliant Chapter name. I started laughing when I read it.

2. I...fell...so...special *Glomp* YOU ROCK!! But who's gonna win our match? wow...I'm totally stoked!

UPDATE!

Jan 13, 2008 03:59 PM by: setokaibaslittlesis chapter 0

^^ I'm glad everyone likes the chapter title. I really just randomly typed it in.

And why do you feel special?
XD
I'm attempting, but everytime I get on the computer with that intention, I get distracted.
Mayhaps I'll get stuff written during school tomorrow and will update it. I'll be updating more now that my little brother's saxaphone lessons have started up. That gives me about two hours with the computer to myself.

Jan 5, 2008 06:52 AM by: SnowKitty chapter 17

Ooh! Very nice chappies!

Jan 4, 2008 02:22 PM by: PandaChan21 chapter 17

Nice...I gotta use that quote sometime...

Dec 28, 2007 09:09 PM by: finalfantasy chapter 17

ooohhhh...
hehe, burn, gaara...

Dec 28, 2007 09:07 PM by: finalfantasy chapter 16

heyyy....
sorry i havent been posting regular comments...
ive been really busy...
but, the story rox! i just finished reading all the new chapters. comment me when u update!
:P

Dec 23, 2007 07:08 PM by: CupidStunt chapter 17

Is Tai and Jami not gonna be in here again?
awell...

Dec 24, 2007 03:03 PM by: setokaibaslittlesis chapter 0

They aren't going to be in every chapter.
The story is told in third person limited, meaning if Keiko isn't there, it isn't being told in the story.
I may change that in the near future.
Rest assured that I will be putting them in before the Chunnin Exam Finals. =)

Dec 24, 2007 06:38 PM by: CupidStunt chapter 0

ok

Dec 22, 2007 04:44 PM by: KionaKina chapter 17

O_O ... *Points and laughs insanely at the part with Jiraiya* THAT was bloody hysterical!!! *Falls over laughing*

Dec 24, 2007 03:03 PM by: setokaibaslittlesis chapter 0

XD Thanks

Dec 22, 2007 12:28 PM by: ladychaos chapter 17

lol Choji isn't going to be happy
awesome chapter

Dec 21, 2007 10:44 PM by: PandaChan21 chapter 16

Right then...no killing Sasuke in the immediate future, then...

Dec 21, 2007 10:41 PM by: PandaChan21 chapter 15

Hey! Gimme back my confetti!

Dec 21, 2007 04:54 PM by: KionaKina chapter 16

Hey, it's Jami! And Selina! *Laughs* I love this chappie, it's awesome...but i'm afraid to mess with Selina now... O_O She seems mmmaaaaaddddd.

Dec 21, 2007 05:52 PM by: CupidStunt chapter 0

No one loves Tai...:(

Dec 21, 2007 01:51 PM by: ladychaos chapter 13

awesome fights, although i thought Kaori would end up the winner...oh well

Dec 21, 2007 01:48 PM by: ladychaos chapter 12

now that is going to be an interesting fight, wonder who will win

Dec 21, 2007 01:46 PM by: ladychaos chapter 10

Anko's entrance was always to coolest
nice chapter

Dec 21, 2007 01:06 PM by: ladychaos chapter 6

WTF! Kakashi is a jerk hitting Balki like that, poor little guy

Dec 21, 2007 12:50 PM by: ladychaos chapter 4

Kakashi is so cruel to Keiko
great chapter though

Dec 21, 2007 12:38 PM by: ladychaos chapter 3

awesome chapter

Dec 21, 2007 12:30 PM by: ladychaos chapter 2

wow, i never would have expected Hinata to act like that...

Dec 21, 2007 12:37 PM by: setokaibaslittlesis chapter 0

Meh...yeah. I need to write the first few chapters again. I changed too many cannons' actual personality.

Dec 21, 2007 12:28 PM by: ladychaos chapter 1

that's a shame they arn't letting her pass, poor Keiko

Dec 21, 2007 12:25 PM by: ladychaos chapter 16

awesome chapter, i like how you've captured the emotions of all the characters
lol it sounds like Selina is PMSing

Dec 21, 2007 12:01 PM by: CupidStunt chapter 16

This is really interesting! I love it! Thanks so much for adding my charaters in! ^_^

I hope Tai gets a bigger part too next chapter. He's basically my alter ego, for my bratty side and Jami is my shy side.

Im faving this!

Dec 19, 2007 06:14 PM by: KionaKina chapter 15

awesomeness!! your story is totally awesome!!!

Dec 17, 2007 08:37 PM by: PandaChan21 chapter 14

*freaks* OH MY GOD, JACKERAH! *still freaks out*

Good chappie! *faves story to infinity*

Dec 17, 2007 04:22 PM by: KionaKina chapter 14

Aww, I remember that fight agaisnt Gaara and Lee. It was really awesome but so sad.

Well, good chappie!

Dec 13, 2007 05:13 PM by: PandaChan21 chapter 13

I agree with Kay-chan and Ki-chan...POOR HINATA! Oh, and the fight was awesome!!!

Dec 12, 2007 05:35 AM by: SnowKitty chapter 13

Agreeing with KionaKina on this one. Our fight was awesome! Great chappie! ^-^

Dec 11, 2007 07:01 PM by: KionaKina chapter 13

HINATA!!! *Panicks* OMG!! GET SOME HELP!!! *Freaks out*

And I loved my fight...BUT HINATA-CHAN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Dec 11, 2007 07:01 PM by: setokaibaslittlesis chapter 0

Man...
0.o
You read that fasssst.

Dec 10, 2007 09:32 PM by: PandaChan21 chapter 12

*stares, then collapses to ground*

Gaara: Oh great, now guess who has to wake her up...

Kay: Oh...that's easy! *pokes me*

Me: AHH! OKAY, I'M UP! *bows to you* Arigato, good work. Read my story, there's more on my attacks in the new chappie!

Everyone: SAYONARA!!

Dec 11, 2007 12:58 PM by: setokaibaslittlesis chapter 0

I'll make sure to that before your battle. ^^

Dec 10, 2007 07:03 PM by: SnowKitty chapter 12

Whoa. That's interesting. I'm gonna be fighting Kaori?! I look forward to seeing how that's going to turn out. Your story is pretty good, although I've only read this chappie! Good job! ^-^

Dec 11, 2007 07:01 PM by: KionaKina chapter 0

yuppers, tis a good fight...you stab me ^^;;

Dec 10, 2007 07:01 PM by: KionaKina chapter 12

O_O I GOTTA FACE MEH FRIEND?! *Falls to knees* NNNNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!

btw, update soon! ^_^

Dec 11, 2007 01:00 PM by: setokaibaslittlesis chapter 0

Yeah, Sorry about that.
I didn't want to change the attacks and we had enough people.
If it makes you feel any better, orginally you were going to fight Jackerah, who is on your own team.
But now I have enough people so teams don't have to fight each other.
And...and...
-feels slightly guilty-

Dec 9, 2007 06:39 PM by: PandaChan21 chapter 11

I'm speechless.

Gaara: *is in teh emo corner* You didn't have to glomp me that hard...now I can't feel my legs...

Meh: *smiles* Good work. Here's a cookie...*gives you cookie, then throws confetti in the air*

Dec 4, 2007 05:09 PM by: KionaKina chapter 11

Wow...that was just...wow

I LOVE your fic, it's so dramatic and well-written!!

Dec 5, 2007 01:08 PM by: setokaibaslittlesis chapter 0

Thanks!
That means a lot to me, KionaKina.

Dec 3, 2007 06:36 PM by: cherryblossom93 chapter 10

Jeepers creepers. Ibiki is intimidating.

Yosh! I love Anko and all of her brash idiocy-ness. Cool chapter, I can't wait for the Forest of Death arc.

^.^

Dec 3, 2007 06:16 PM by: KionaKina chapter 10

I loved that part of the test, it was so funny how they all were like "WTF!? Ya mean that was a fluke?!" It's awesome...

CHUUNIN EXAMS ROCK!!! Let me know if you need details on Kaori for it

Dec 3, 2007 04:55 PM by: sasuke4kun chapter 10

it was good reminds me of the naruto exam i like.
Keiko seems a howle lot like naruto which is cool.
I love Anko's entry LOL she is ready.(:
but i haven't read your other ones yet i just might you never know when you will get a comment from me.
OOO OO ja you are the first one i have comented on a stroy ever congrats. JK
im out.

Dec 3, 2007 06:18 AM by: KionaKina chapter 9

Wooow...KAORI!!! *Cheers* Thanks for including me!!!

Nov 26, 2007 01:20 PM by: cherryblossom93 chapter 8

Awesomeness. Great job on the chapter! This is one of my favorite arcs in the series, so I love reading fanfictions on them.

Update soon!

^.^

Nov 25, 2007 07:04 PM by: setokaibaslittlesis chapter 8

;___;
Why doesn't it accpet my punctuation and paragraphs?
WHHHYYYY?

Nov 26, 2007 01:24 PM by: cherryblossom93 chapter 0

Oh, you're submitting it as a document that you saved in your computer. FAC is stupid like that.

It replaces all quotes with weird little squares, when you submit a chapter from a file already on your computer. Just copy and paste everything from the original document (after clicking the BB version of submitting a chapter).

Ah....I stink at giving instructions, don't I? XD

Feel free to ask if you have any questions.

^.^

Aug 2, 2007 05:17 PM by: finalfantasy chapter 7

YAY! thank u so much for updating, i have been waiting for forever! i love it!

Jul 5, 2007 09:15 PM by: finalfantasy chapter 6

omg! after this, im gonna HATE kakashi!

Apr 6, 2007 04:21 PM by: cherryblossom93 chapter 6

Eep! Kakashi doesn't like puppies very much, does he? STOP HITTING THE PUPPY! IT'S A PUPPY! You don't hit puppies, you just don't. Sicko. Lol, sorry, but I have two dogs (one of which is a puppy). Sorry for the lateness of my comment...But great chapters! Okay, I only have one small piece of advice that you really don't have to listen to, cause it isn't a big deal. If you feel like it, space everything out a little more. It makes the story look longer and it's easier to read. Just a suggestion, because I know that I want some critism from people on my stories...All I get are compliments or threats when I don't update fast enough...Mostly threats...(I'm afraid to sleep at night...)XD

Jan 10, 2007 05:53 PM by: cherryblossom93 chapter 4

Yay! Can't wait to see what happens next...^^
Thanx a bunch for lettin' me know!

Oct 30, 2006 03:16 PM by: cherryblossom93 chapter 3

great chappie...still luvin' it!!!!

And just so ya know, i finished Sasuke gets amnesia and started a sequel cause it was kinda short...(its called The Sequel:Naruto Gets Amnesia....i know...how creative am i?)

^^

Oct 2, 2006 02:24 PM by: cherryblossom93 chapter 2

Keep going! I never knew kakashi was so evil....poor Keiko....gullable Hinata....o well, thats life...WRITE MORE!

Sep 28, 2006 01:51 PM by: setokaibaslittlesis chapter 1

Oh my gosh. This chapter is so horribly written even I can't stand it.

Sep 28, 2006 01:49 PM by: setokaibaslittlesis chapter 1

Meh. I can't get the first fist chapter to delete. curse you FAC system! Please read the one that says something at the top about editing instead. The Original was full of things that weren't realistic.

Sep 27, 2006 04:36 PM by: cherryblossom93 chapter 1

thats great! please write more! ^_^