Chapter 1 - The New Team 7

Hm, it's a nice start, but it lacks a lot of detail. 
 
First of all, instead of putting breaks in between each scene like you did "In the Classroom" at the top, you could describe the time of day, the weather, who was in the classroom, what they were doing, and so on along with telling the reader that they were in a classroom--but be sure to say what kind of classroom it is (the Ninja Academy, in this case).  It doesn't create any real visual in the readers mind with just "classroom".  And it's the same thing with the very first sentence:
 
"The teacher was calling out teams and then Celine and Jamal bursted through the doors "
 
What was the teacher's expression?  Who was the teacher?  How was s/he calling out the names?  Was the teacher calling names at all (it says "calling out teams)?  What was s/he wearing?  Was the teacher a man or a woman?  You left all these questions that help give the reader an idea of what you saw when you wrote this story unanswered.  Of course, not all of these questions' answers are needed, but there are more, and some detail needs to be added that doesn't really have to do with the teacher, but the students in the classroom that were listening to him/her (Were some of them not even paying attention?). 
 
Moving onto the next part of the sentence. First of all, "bursted" isn't a real word (just to let you know).  The reader might be able to see Jamal and Celine burst through the doors panting or whatnot -- but was that your intention?  Did you see the two "burst" through the doors happily, or frantically or something different from what I saw?  Describe and show us what you saw in your mind when you were writing this.  Quoting many English teachers (I am sure), "Show, don't tell."
 
On to punctuation: I see that you added a lot of question marks and exclaimation points to the end of Jamal's first spoken sentence in the story.  Going along with details, I'd suggest only adding a couple of "?" and "!" to the end of dialogue sentences with a lot of emotion in them.  Just "show" us what/how his expression or tone of voice did/changed during the end or beginning or middle of that sentence.  Sentences with just punctuation at the end doesn't give a visual of what is really going on inside the character's head.  I also noticed that there are no clear endings to the end of your sentences (well, the end of the paragraph is clear, but not the sentences.)  You have no periods or cammas or any other type of punctuation besides the question marks and the exclaimation points.  "..." does not END a sentence, it shows a pause, but cannot be put in the place a comma all the time.  Utilizing correct punctuation will help the reader understand exactly how you want your sentences to sound. 
 
Your story really does have a good plot so far.  It's just detail and  punctuation that are the main problems.  I'm sorry if I seem a little harsh, but that the way it is. ^^'
 
 -- Faramae

Ugh, I hate it when it puts all those weird "A"'s and makes it hard to read -_-'

Sounds like this is going to be good. =)

coo sounds good i like u made da teams bigger

It's nice, though the use of "zsdt...easdrtet...sderesrt..." is a little...er...misused. The very last paragraph, I noticed, is all one sentence, only seperated by "..."s and stuff. Maybe breaking them into separate sentences?

Pretty awesome story so far YAY STORIES

Haha Teach loves me!

cool^^

thanks

YAY !!! this awesome so far plz continue^-^