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Chapter 1 - My Heart

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Chapter 1 - My Heart

Chapter 1 - My Heart
How much more can I take
Scars and cuts
Breaks and bruises

It feels like I've been bitten by a snake
Slithering and crawling
Poison and fangs

You can't imagine the pain
Stings and throbbing
Pounding and poking

As I stand in the rain
Drizziling and dropping
Pouring and dripping

I will wait for you
Standing and waiting
Watching and wondering

But only if you knew
Around and loving
Holding and caring

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lilbloodsucker on July 26, 2010, 6:17:44 AM

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lilbloodsuckerwow that is great

ProjectINFINITY on July 25, 2010, 4:34:44 PM

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ProjectINFINITYI like it alot

KyiNekoYasha on June 21, 2010, 3:59:16 AM

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KyiNekoYashathis ones pretty good :)

DeathTheKid8 on June 20, 2010, 2:11:08 PM

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DeathTheKid8oOOOOOOooooooH i love it! although when you put watching you put WAtching >.< it bothers meeeeeeee!!!

iamkira on June 20, 2010, 2:12:38 PM

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iamkiraAll better

DeathTheKid8 on June 20, 2010, 2:15:41 PM

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DeathTheKid8YAY i have issues with these things XD

painblack on June 20, 2010, 12:01:49 PM

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painblackits deep. i like it. you asked me to review it so i will. in the second line you should make the l an l. i really like this one.

ShiaLaB486 on June 19, 2010, 3:17:26 PM

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ShiaLaB486Wow... Thats depressing... XD

TailsLover80 on April 19, 2010, 12:03:53 PM

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TailsLover80This one is deep, describes love, pain, and suffering. I like this alot man. Nice work.

LuluxKei101 on April 18, 2010, 8:51:27 AM

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LuluxKei101This is amazing!! I love it! I understand how it feels too... So that's a bonus! You have real talent! XD

RavetheHedgehog on September 1, 2009, 1:20:18 PM

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RavetheHedgehogWow, nice poem! The word flow is great! You should write more :]

TearJerker on October 15, 2008, 7:22:08 AM

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TearJerkerThat was just too sweet. :)

SomekindofFreak on October 15, 2008, 7:01:48 AM

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SomekindofFreakI really liked the repetition here. very emotional piece, here!

BottleOfNandaTanda on October 14, 2008, 12:41:23 PM

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BottleOfNandaTandaOmg It's beautiful-cries a little bit- It's so sad D: But, I love how you write :]. -faves-