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Chapter 2 - A Friendly Gathering

my masterpiece story. Im re-writing the story from scratch with my MUCH BETTER writing skills.
Prototype Complete. *Reworking it NOW!*

Yeah, I''m definitely working on it now.

Chapter 2 - A Friendly Gathering

Chapter 2 - A Friendly Gathering
A second chapter! I finally feel like I'm back and happy about what I'm writing. I put my heart and soul, 100% into this story, so please enjoy it and comment.

P.S. I feel happy, and it's been awhile since I've been happy. Please don't upset me and ask about my other stories that I'm not continuing right now.


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After around 20 or 25 seconds, Brandon emerged from his trailer, shutting the door behind him slowly. He was wearing the helmet on his head now, and lifted it up slightly so that Eric could see the ice pack placed under it. Eric understood, and tried to comfort him about his mistake
"Come on, don' t be such a sad sack. We should go meet May and Christina at her house."
Brandon slouched as he followed Eric's lead down the trailer park, remarking quietly
"I coulda made it, man. I swear I could."
Eric didn't doubt his best friend, but instead replied
"Yeah yeah, just get over it, will ya?"
Eric stopped in his tracks, remembered something, and turned around to see the trailers still parked in a row. Eric asked Brandon
"Shouldn't you put those back?"
Brandon continued forward and passed Eric while lazily replying
"Nah, I'll fix 'em when we get back."
Eric followed after Brandon and thought to himself
("Heh, that's Brandon alright. Always a procastinator.")




So, They went on their way through the small neighborhood, although Eric thought it more like one long street. After only a few seconds they arrived at their destination, since Eric lived very close to all his friends. Christina's house wasn't hard to spot in this neighborhood, since it was simply a large, elegant mansion surrounded by a bunch of small houses. Christina Kylie, you see, was born into a rich family, but she saw it more as an annoyance. She was quite rebellious against her parents, and especially anyone who tried to offer her help. Anyone but her friends anyway, as she had formed strong bonds with them since her childhood. When they walked up to the door, Brandon was the first to ring the doorbell, causing a voice from behind the large door to call back
"Who is it?"
The voice sounded old, so it couldn't be Christina. Before Brandon or Eric could respond, they heard a loud, angry girl yell from behind the door
"Go away, Jeeves! I can open a friggin door!"
Now that was Christina, no doubt about it. After attempting to calm herself with a sigh, Christina now asked with a nicer voice
"Yes? Who is it?"
Eric nervously answered back
"It's just us, Christina."
After a few seconds of silence, Christina threw the door open with such force that it slammed into the side of the house. She saw Brandon and punched him in the shoulder asking
"Late again, Brandon?"
Eric covered for Brandon as he rubbed his shoulder in pain by replying
"Sorry, Christina. Brandon tried to pull off another one of his dangerous stunts, but he got hurt."
To prove his alibi, Brandon lifted up his helmet again and showed Christina the ice pack. In an immediate change of heart, Christina gasped and said
"I'm so sorry, Brandon. I didn't know."
Brandon, glad at her sudden change of mood to sympathy, tried to reply but instead was greeted with her fist clenching his shirt and another change of mood while adding
"You should've been more careful, you big oaf!"
Before she got a change to swing at him, a younger girl held her arm back with dainty hands and said
"No Christina! You shouldn't hurt our friends!"
Christina let go of him as Brandon sighed in relief, saying
"Thanks May, that was a close one."
May smiled from the appreciation, and then hugged Brandon replying
"It's alright. I won't ever let my friends get hurt."
Brandon rather enjoyed May's tight hug, and found himself staying in it for a bit too long, only for Christina to hit the back of his helmet. Brandon immediately let go of May after that and exclaimed
"Ow!"
Christina merely said
"That's enough, Brandon."
Brandon felt the pain, even through his helmet. Christina was a tomboy, wearing a skull-designed red T-shirt, and blue jeans cut into shorts. May Ferrial had been sleeping over at Christina's for the past few weeks while she tried to find a new place, and this was apparent since May was still wearing her night gown. Eric noticed this and asked her
"May, why do you still have your pajamas on?"
May had seemingly not noticed, looking down and gasping. She replied
"I guess I forgot. Excuse me, I have to go change."
She pardoned herself and ran up the long staircase towards the guest room she was staying in. As Christina closed the front door once the two had entered, Eric sidled over to Brandon and whispered
"What's with the hug?"
"She went first, I just returned the favor."
*sigh*"Just try not to do anything else stupid today."
"Hey!"
Christina didn't hear their whispered conversation, but waited for them to finish and heard Brandon quickly change the subject
*sigh*"I wish I was rich like you, Christina."
Indeed, Brandon envied Christina's rich lifestyle while Christina herself loathed it. She angrily replied
"Trust me, no you don't."
After a few short seconds, May arrived at the top of the stairs announcing
"I'm ready to go, now!"
As soon as she said that, the four heard a dog barking coming from another room, only for it to get louder as it rushed towards them. A grey-ish bloodhound emerged from the other room and ran towards May. It jumped up, and she gladly picked it up and said
"Oh, you're so cute!"
May was now dressed in a light-blue shirt and short skirt, and as she hugged the dog against her busty chest, Brandon couldn't help but ogle her for a few seconds. Of course, that was all it took for Christina to notice and smack the back of Brandon's helmet again. Christina, jealous, angrily asked Brandon
"Who are you looking at, Brandon!?"
He hesitated, and nervously answered
"Y-You, of course. Heh."
May put the dog down next to her, and walked down the stairs, letting it follow her to Eric. However, when it got to Brandon, it barked in anger and he jumped back. May finally got up to Eric as the barking stopped and pleaded
"Can I bring him with me? Please?"
May clasped her hands together as Eric looked down at the dog in front of him. Instead of barking at Eric, he sat up straight and stared with his piercing Indigo eyes.. Eric didn't find any problem with that, and said
"I don't see why not."
May, in quite the hugging mood, expressed her joy by hugging Eric and saying
"Oh, thankyouthankyouthankyou Thank you!"
Eric was released shortly after, and asked May
"So, what's his name?"
May looked down at the dog, and dumbly replied
"His name? Oh! It's here on his collar!"
She lifted him up and presented him to Eric, showing the jingling dog collar that read "TANK."
"What an odd name for a dog." Eric said, wondering who this dog belonged to previously. Christina added to the conversation
"May found that dog at the park yesterday, snooping around and looking for something."
Brandon impatiently called out
"C'mon, we're wasting time here. Let's just get to the park. I wanna play some basketball, today."
They all began to walk out the front door as Eric opened it, and Christina replied with a snarky tone
"It's always what you want, isn't it?"
Once the rest were through the door, Eric was about to close it behind him when he had the strangest feeling. A sense of danger arising in the future, but he convinced himself it was nothing.
("After all, if it was something bad, wouldn't there be a sign or something?")




(fans of mine will get this joke)Meanwhile, in a construction site on the outskirts of Evergreen City there lie a large pile of rocks blocking what looked to be an extremely old cave. No one was there at the time, but the large crane equipment was suddenly knocked over by way of a large rock that rolled down the hill over looking the city. The crane subsequently knocked off a boulder from the pile which then made the whole pile roll off and collapse. Smoke filled the air, and then suddenly, a young figure appeared. A feminine voice called out
"Hello?...Anyone? Ugh, my head."
The smoke slowly cleared, and revealed a girl walking out and looking towards the city.
("Where is everybody?...Where am I?")
She accidentally steps forwards onto a small stone tablet. It had words written on it, and she picked it up and read it. It only contained a few short sentences, all by three different writers/chiselers.

"Don't get into trouble."
"We'll be back, don't sleep too long, Agent X."
"I could care less what you do. I'm leaving."


"Goodbye..."

"Goodbye?" The girl wonders to herself, as if puzzled by that word. Suddenly, she realizes and gasps, dropping the tablet to the ground. She looks around to find any civilians, but doesn't see any. She then sinks to the ground in despair, and asks herself while crying
"Am I-...Am I the only one left?"
Then, she was hit in the face by a piece of paper blowing in the wind. She took it off her face, and read the address on it. It was seemingly an address and nothing else. She told herself
"Maybe there are some answers here."
She looked forward, and saw a sign ahead saying "Now Entering Evergreen City." She said to herself
"Well, at least I'm closeby."
So, she started walking, not knowing where she was really going. She was unsure of what might await her, but this was all she had right now.



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Whew! That turned out great! Oh well, please comment and enjoy!

(I'll have one of these each chapter)
POLL: Who's your favorite character so far? If you have a reason, Why?
Current Characters:
Eric Psyria
Brandon Forshire
Christina Kylie
May Ferrial
Tank
the Mysterious Woman
or "Agent X"



Comment and let me know what you think!

Later, dudes and dudettes.

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SilverGirl13 on February 10, 2010, 8:50:10 AM

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SilverGirl13Definatly a tie between agent x and eric... there are some characters later on i like too but those won't be introduced for awhile... Anyways... its good, well written. I like this newer version way more details written into it. By the way, will you have another drawing contest for this version of TSOH? If you do I will totally enter it.

overlordlaharl on February 10, 2010, 12:00:59 PM

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overlordlaharlwell, hopefully there will be more entries but yes, I hope to have at least two drawing contests.