Naruto- Rough Manga, Draft 1, Page 2 by nextguardian

Naruto- Rough Manga, Draft 1, Page 2

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The second page of my series of rough-draft works. This one REALLY needs work, and was sketched pretty quickly. The first panel especially. I tried a variety of things, but nothing really worked. Oh well, I'll fix it eventaully!

So, what's happened here: My OC, Ryouko, stepped in the way of Sasuke's sword to save Sakura. The largets panel completely sucks, and needs work. But, rough draft, I can get away with it this time!

Dialogue:

Panel 2: (kof) (hack) (GRAB)

Panel 5: Ryouko-san...Y-you took the stirke? F-for me? Don't die! Please!

Panel 6: Sasuke...Never hit a lady...You spineless coward! (foff koff)

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Category Anime/Manga » Naruto series » Fan Comics (doujinshi)
Date Submitted June 9, 2008, 7:35:09 PM
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Media Graphite pencil
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Reference Various Naruto

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subculturalgirl113 on June 9, 2008, 1:30:24 PM

lol awwww its cute lol ^__^ you should create an actual manga now hun!

Falconlobo on June 9, 2008, 12:57:17 PM

cool^^

Neopetgirl on June 9, 2008, 12:54:00 PM

I don't want to say anything mean, because I know this is the rough draft, so I'm sure it'll only improve. Mangas are not easy at all. So I think you should work on how someone is wielding a weapon, because I can't see Sasuke's hand gripping the sword really. I'm not so good at drawing weapons but in mangas and animes drawing the weapon right is a key part of an action scene.
So, when drawing a weapon try using a ruler to make it look straight. You should also try using weaponry effects to give the character motion such as adding sweeping curves or wind around the weapon. That's what I've learned, but I haven't really used the advice.

By the way I really like how the Sakura came out in this drawing, I can't wait to see the end result to this. ^^