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Frindle

A manga Jess -starvigmoose- and I are writting. Frindle is a boy that was placed in a psyciatric youth care center because he can see the supernatural. But what the dactors don't know.... Over half of the kids there have nothing REALLY wrong with them. Th

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Chapter 1 - Chapter 1
Submitted: July 3, 2006 • Updated: July 3, 2006
Word count: 459 • Size: 2k • Comments: 3 • views: 151

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Kittyduck on July 3, 2006, 11:12:30 AM

Kittyduck on (Chapter: 1)
KittyduckEenteresting. I agree with Hakkuko on the need of description, but otherwise this seems to be a story of intrigue building up here.

By the way, I never spoke 'til I was three either.

sis on July 3, 2006, 10:35:10 AM

sis on (Chapter: 1)
sisPretty good nice job!

hakkohu on July 3, 2006, 10:31:40 AM

hakkohu on (Chapter: 1)
hakkohuThis is good but I think every thing is happening to soon, the time seems to go by to soon, and in some parts it not that descritive. If you work on it you can make it really good, it's pretty good as it is but just practice. Like Kin, it still has some problems.