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From Dust to Dust

Death of an Undead. Vampires.

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Chapter 1 - From Dust to Dust
Submitted: March 14, 2008 • Updated: March 14, 2008
Word count: 143 • Size: <1k • Comments: 3 • views: 275

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thedudedisturbed on May 3, 2008, 11:34:50 AM

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thedudedisturbedyou need "shall" everywhere there is "shalt". shalt is used after thou in imperative sentences, thy=your(not to be mistaken for thou art, or you're)
though THY soul, the equivalent of will is wilt,
turn back to whence thou came
 
thee is another equivalent of you. I think thee would be more appropriate, as I think ye is a later term.
 
I'm no expert but this is what I discerned from reading the KJV of the Bible. but I'm 100% certain about shall being where all the shalts are.

Alexis_Hoheimer on May 4, 2008, 4:22:56 PM

Alexis_Hoheimer on (Chapter: 1)
Alexis_Hoheimerlol thanks for that^^
someone else told me the same on FF.net when i put it up about...2-3 years ago... i just never bothered to fix it >_>

SunaNoFara on March 22, 2008, 10:50:02 AM

SunaNoFara on (Chapter: 1)
SunaNoFaraThanks for your entry! It's a really great poem^^ You do have to be paying attention to actually understand it, but that's what makes it wonderful :D Thank you again!