September 1, 2004
September 1, 2004
|THE BEST POEM I EVER WROTE!!!******READ ASAP!|
Chapter 1 - A
Submitted: September 1, 2004 • Updated: September 1, 2004
Word count: 159 • Size: <1k • Comments: 22 • views: 380
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Live_Like_You_Mean_It on January 12, 2006, 5:15:15 PM
Make the lines of your poem seperate to each other, and then I'll marvel at your work ;)
(if you don't understand, e.g.
You give me reasons to cry,
Bit you always make me smile,
You tell me I should try,)
Living_Dead_Girl on November 20, 2005, 4:45:20 AM
minerva28 on August 27, 2005, 8:24:37 PM
Like thr ryhm
I write poems like that too!
Hmm.. but if u really wanna twist a persons imagination u shud use words that can be felt,seen,smell and etc. that way a person cud really picture ur poem out.Like love for example ur just reading it nothing really pops out of a persons brain ^^
My english teacher made us attend a 3 day seminar on how to write a poem. That was the main idea i think during the seminar ever since then i did really improve ^^ sure he commented my poems in a nasty way but it sure helped me realize my mistakes.
hoped it help!
Oh and please use stanzas ^^ please and thank u ^^
_Sai_ on August 25, 2005, 9:56:02 PM
Wow that's just perfect!
soalone1000 on August 19, 2005, 6:30:14 AM
Genjo_Shyazo on July 30, 2005, 5:30:14 PM
LizzardQueeng on July 7, 2005, 11:33:43 PM
add comas between "thoughts" Example;
"You give me reasons to cry, But you always make me smile," That way it's easier to read^^
*faves* you're so good^^ nice and Melancholic...
aquajogger on June 30, 2005, 1:28:51 PM
I'm not flaming you, but there are a couple lines where the rythym gets a bit thrown off. Umm... "That you'll be better than me", "But all I can do is sleep", and "I hope you're glad".
It's really nothing big, and I know that not all of the lines are the same length, I just thought I'd point those out.
I like it, though. It's sweet, in a sad way. Very nice work! d^_^b
Hyper_Freak on May 17, 2005, 6:11:31 AM