Fortunes of a Feather
Submitted October 4, 2005 Updated October 4, 2005 Status Incomplete |
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Chapters
Chapters
Chapter 1 - Visions of Red
Submitted: October 4, 2005 • Updated: October 4, 2005
Word count: 3211 • Size: 16k • Comments: 2 • views: 323
Chapter 2 - A World Apart
Submitted: October 4, 2005 • Updated: October 4, 2005
Word count: 4837 • Size: 25k • Comments: 1 • views: 304
Chapter 3 - Song of Angels
Submitted: October 4, 2005 • Updated: October 4, 2005
Word count: 4678 • Size: 24k • Comments: 1 • views: 302
Chapter 4 - Silent Hearts
Submitted: October 4, 2005 • Updated: October 4, 2005
Word count: 4904 • Size: 24k • Comments: 1 • views: 291
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MagusFarlorn on October 2, 2008, 10:46:48 AM
MagusFarlorn on (Chapter: 1)
Crystal56 on October 8, 2005, 11:19:09 AM
Crystal56 on (Chapter: 4)
It seems you have a really solid plotline here going! I commend you! The description is really amazing, you use it more than dialogue. I'm the other way around, using dialogue more than clever description. Yepies, this one is something cool too.
I hope I wasn't to harsh on the Sakura one again...I apologize! This one is really good too!
Wai! So anyways, yeah, you really do have a lot of talent in the field of writing fanfictions too!
I hope I wasn't to harsh on the Sakura one again...I apologize! This one is really good too!
Wai! So anyways, yeah, you really do have a lot of talent in the field of writing fanfictions too!
Crystal56 on October 8, 2005, 11:12:59 AM
Crystal56 on (Chapter: 3)
Crystal56 on October 8, 2005, 11:11:03 AM
Crystal56 on (Chapter: 2)
Crystal56 on October 8, 2005, 11:08:20 AM
Crystal56 on (Chapter: 1)
You should start a new paragraph when someone new speaks, just as a matter of form. Like:
"Well," she said, "blah, blah!" Hitomi felt angst tug at her heartstrings.
"No!" cried Van, as he plummeted to his doom, "Let us sing the Doom Song!" The wind whistled merrily about him as the rocks came up to greet him.
It also serves to break up the story, making it easier to read, and letting you find your place again more quickly if you should happen to blink for an extra-long period of time.
If the same person speaks again before someone else does, you don't have to start a new paragraph, unless it starts a whole new subject, or train of thought.
I hope this doesn't sound nasty, it isn't meant to be. Just as you know art, I know a bit about writing.