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A Fairies Beauty

a poem about the beauty of a fairy.

Chapters

Chapters

Chapter 1 - 1
Submitted: June 30, 2005 • Updated: June 30, 2005
Word count: 95 • Size: <1k • Comments: 3 • views: 95

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kos on September 24, 2005, 2:00:57 AM

kos on (Chapter: 1)
kosI love the imagery of this poem. Stanza 3 is my favorite, it bring up such great pictures in my head. They say a picture is worth a thousand words, but you've created a thousand pictures with just a few words. The ending is superb.

If I was going to be picky, I'd point out the over use of some words and phrases like "made of" (lines 4, 8, 9), and "beauty" (lines 10, 17, 19). In some places the repetition enhances to the impact of the poem (e.g. lines 13 and 14), but in the ones I cited above I think it detracts a bit. Maybe try some other words to enhance the images that you already have. Have you though about changing the title, so that the reader doesn't know that it is a poem about a fairy until they get to the last stanza? I think that would make it even better. But don't let me tell you how to write your poem if you don't agree -- go with what you feel.

Overall, I love this poem. Great work.

x_art_lovin_chick_x on August 15, 2005, 7:30:54 PM

x_art_lovin_chick_x on (Chapter: 1)
x_art_lovin_chick_xi love this poem as i love all ur others

theGhostofInuYasha on July 1, 2005, 4:07:10 AM

theGhostofInuYasha on (Chapter: 1)
theGhostofInuYashaIt's all because of us....
That's so beautiful! I love it!
*favez*