Chapter 1 - My poem
Submitted July 5, 2005 Updated July 5, 2005 Status Incomplete | This is a poem that I wrote to my crush.(I haven't given it to him what do you think?) Any way this is my best poem and I would appreciate it greatly if you would review!!!
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Chapter 1 - My poem
Chapter 1 - My poem
The Love in front of me
Oh, my love can't you see
You belong with me
I once thought of you as a friend
A friend to the end
My friend I now see you
Your eyes, the brown hue
The never ending depthes of your soul
Like a black hole
I saw staring back at me
I saw beauty, that I never thought I'd see
That was the day
You took my breath away
I had been blind not to see
The love in front of me
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katara719 on May 12, 2006, 9:12:45 AM
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that was beautifulkatara719 on December 16, 2006, 10:16:18 AM
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that's how i feel with my crush too! he is my friend and now....~katara
dont_ever_quote_Mark_Twain on April 14, 2006, 2:34:27 PM
Dude that ROCKS!!! Thats so -sweet-!GrimDeath on December 14, 2005, 10:02:20 AM
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HOLY shoot!!! That was truly beautiful... *favs*Keep up the good work :)
GothicWiccan on July 25, 2005, 9:05:05 PM
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that's really good! i think you should tell him. and do some more poems too! ^_^ great work!hipeople on July 8, 2005, 4:28:30 AM
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Thats great!!It kinda made me cry!I_luv_jesus on July 7, 2005, 1:03:03 AM
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Wow! That's really good. Make more poems soon! KH_Fan525 on July 5, 2005, 2:41:31 AM
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thank you. I didn't think I would get a comment as soon as I posted it! Thank you to any others that review. Should I tell him?facelift on July 5, 2005, 2:38:03 AM
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this is a really good poem!!