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Chapter 2 - Ding Aling

A story about the Hidden Sparks team!
Dont be scared of the # of chaps!!! Most of them are Super Short! So really, its like there is 20-24 chapters!!!!
The ratings are just to be safe, its better to be too high with them than too low ^_^
~JJ

Chapter 2 - Ding Aling

Chapter 2 - Ding Aling
Story © KDS aka JJ
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***********************************The next morning at the 5 training area******

"Ok people...i dont want to make this long so just say your first name and something you like...for instance im Mew and i like teaching" Mew Sensei said "You there...You go first" She pointed at Winni

"Me...well my name is Winni and i like pets^^" Winni explained

"Good...now you" She pointed to Celine

"Im Celine and i like hanging with my friends!" Celine said excited

"OK now you" Mew pointed at Jamal

"My name is Jamal and i like tacos!^^" Jamal said as everyone stared at him "What?"

"And i guess im the last one...Im Nova and i like training"

"Ok then lets get started!" Mew said pulling out 3 bells and pointing to 5 logs "This is how it works, whoever doesnt get a bell by the afternoon is getting tied up and cant eat until dinner" The Jonin explained

"But uhhh...Mew sensei...theres only 2 bells..." Jamal said

"Exactly...so no matter what 2 people will not eat...so you dont only have to get a bell from me before afternoon...you must get a bell from me before someone else does before the afternoon" Mew explained some more "Alright bring it on...THE TEST HAS NOW OFFICIALY BEGUN!" She said and immediately everyone vanished into the trees...everyone except for Celine and Winni...for they thought that they were strong enough to take Mew on!

"This sucks...Sis dont be stupid...you know you cant beat her!" Jamal whispered and then he saw a truly shocking sight!...Nova snuck up behind Mew and got a bell! "What the-" Jamal said

"looks like im going to eat early everyone" Nova said and then found a nice tree and sat on a branch just watching

"Wow i need to put up my guard!" Mew noticed and then while she was looking back Winni made to handsigns and said "Wolf claw Jutsu!" and suddenly her hand had claws and tried to scratch Mew but Mew jumped back and evaded...Winni's hand went back to normal

"Woah..." Celine said so thats why she like animals so much...most of her jutsus probably do stuff like that Celine thought

"That was close..." Mew said "ok lets play...Water Style-Water Cloud jutsu!" Mew said as a cloud of water suddenly smacked Winni's head

"Shadow Clone Jutsu!" Two people said in unison as there were 5 Jamals and 5 Celines

"Spider Silk Jutsu" Winni said as she fired numerous strings of silk at Mew and Mew dodged each one with a cartwheel

"Now!" Jamal said as one of his clones tried punch Mew and she jumped up and flicked his head while another Jamal jumped behind her and kicked Mew down...and as he did so the clone also grabbed the last bell! "And thats game!" Jamal said as Mew landed on the ground in a handstand

*********************************10 minutes later*******************************

"Enjoy your meal!" Mew said as she walked away "Oh and one more thing...dont feed them" Mew said pointing to Celine and Winni...but as she left Jamal held some rice to Celines mouth and Nova did Winni "I SAW THAT!!!" Mew said running back and was very angry that they disobeyed her "now why did you do that?" She asked

"Because a teamate never leaves a comrade behind...so if i eat...they eat!" Jamal said...even though deep inside him he felt like he was going to be left back in the Academy

"Yeah!" Winni agreed

"Why you little rats!...Ya KNOW WHAT YOU..." Jamal already looked down gloomly "PASS!" Mew said cheerfully "You guys have demonstrated teamwork even if it meant not becoming a ninja..." Mew said "C'mon everyone we're celebrating!"

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Tis it

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winxgirl21 on March 21, 2008, 1:38:04 AM

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winxgirl21Awesome chapter. =) Teamwork is very important.and now they get to celebrate!

kogalover2013 on March 7, 2008, 7:25:37 AM

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kogalover2013coo coo like how they worked 2gether not like naruto

rlkitten on March 3, 2008, 1:59:40 PM

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rlkittenIt seemed to go rather quickly. More detail will help keep readers hooked. For instance,
 
"This sucks...Sis dont be stupid...you know you cant beat her!" Jamal whispered and then he saw a truly shocking sight!...Nova snuck up behind Mew and got a bell! "What the-" Jamal said
 
How did she get the bell?
 
edited slightly:
"This sucks,...Sis don't be stupid...you know you cant beat her!" Jamal whispered and then saw a truly shocking sight! Nova was silently creeping behind Mew and with one swift movement of her hand, snatched a bell! Simple as that! "What the-" Jamal stammered.
 
Words like "stammered" and "whispered" (which you already used >_o) help describe a lot. Use them when you can, but not too much or a reader may become too overwhelmed with trying to cram it all into their brain.

moog1895 on July 12, 2007, 11:08:00 AM

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moog1895YUUUS!!! I AM A BEAST!

Symphoniaprincess101 on June 29, 2007, 3:36:30 AM

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Symphoniaprincess101*laughing a little cause of the ending*Ok still cool^^

pizza24 on June 27, 2007, 7:24:39 AM

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pizza24i got tied up....im glad to have AWESOME!! teammates....great job can't wait for more^^

sasukeXsakuraforever on June 26, 2007, 5:57:50 AM

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sasukeXsakuraforeveraww! Your so nice!!! *phew* I thought I was going to be stuck to the log all day! Yay, I love this chapter!! I can't wait for the next one^^