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Chapter 1 - Downpour

It doesn't really have a designated character, so I chose the one I thought it most likely resembled. ^.^ Have fun!

Chapter 1 - Downpour

Chapter 1 - Downpour
It pours outside;
Down falls the rain.
A steady beat
As energy drains,
And I feel the pain
Rising in my chest.
I don't know why
I can't explain
It's just there
Pain throbbing pain.
It's been there as long
As I can remember.
Listening to the rain,
Dripping,
Dropping,
Plipping,
Plopping,
Down onto the ground
Creating a steady beat.
Down it comes,
Down, down down,
Until it hits the earth
With a "thud" on the ground.
Hundreds upon hundreds,
Thousands upon thousands,
Of little water droplets
Thudding on the ground.
I feel the pain
Rising in my chest.
I don't know why
I can't explain.
It's just there.
Listening to the rain,
The rain,
Rain. . .
Wait, that's not rain
That's the sound of my tears
Thudding on the ground.
Rising in my chest,
My breath is gone.
I can no longer live.
So goodbye, sweet rain,
My only companion in the night.
Goodbye, sweet tears,
Who kept me company.
Goodbye, sweet life,
You were good to me.
Goodbye, sweet love,
I am now just a memory.

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A/N - Yeah, this could relate to a lot of different characters, so. . . I didn't pick one! Please review and tell me who YOU thought I was referring to! Yay! Reviews! I live on them! ::breathes in reviews and then eats one:: Yummy. Flame. ::grabs another flame and eats it:: As you can see, all are welcome! Feel free to check out my other fics if you enjoyed this one! ^.^

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rainbowfox16 on November 6, 2007, 9:49:04 AM

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rainbowfox16Jeez...You are just intent on making me cry constantly aren't you? *sniffles* Its so...Real. You know, it relates so much to actual people, or me at least. I don't know how others feel but, I love your poem. *favs it*

nyuu on January 29, 2007, 5:07:43 AM

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nyuuwow...(a shiver in the back) This is beautiful!! (no, I didn't copy that of the last comments)
It's a very well done poem...it transmits the feelings and it's indeed well composed...*faves it*

KotokoPlum on May 26, 2005, 11:15:28 PM

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KotokoPlumWow. I was browsing through Juli's faves (for some weird unknown reason) and came across this. This is so beautiful! I don't know who this would reminds me of, but it's powerful all the same. *faves* Very nicely written. ^^

ReiRei on April 21, 2004, 10:13:14 AM

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ReiReiThanks, I appreciate your comments a lot. And you're welcome for the comment because you deserved it! I loved your picture! I mean, the wings. . . the arrows. . . the blood. . . the broken sword. . . It was just beautiful! There's no other word to describe it!

Juli on April 20, 2004, 2:21:21 PM

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Julibtw: i added this to faves and also thanks for commenting on my pic!^^

Juli on April 20, 2004, 2:19:15 PM

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Juli*struck speechless* Wow. This is beautiful. I can't believe there haven't been any comments on this yet. The mood is very powerful here.Sorry, but this doesn't really remind me of any particular anime or whatsit, but I think this is good enough to create a new story of its own.