Chapter 1 - ..........
Submitted July 26, 2004 Updated July 26, 2004 Status Incomplete | I WROTE THIS WHEN MY GF BROKE UP WITH ME FOR SUM1 ELSE...OK..BYE
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Chapter 1 - ..........
Chapter 1 - ..........
you say you love me day to day
but then you tell me you love him more than me
and all my pain and misery seeks out and covers me
so now i follow on my own way to live on for another damn day
remeber when you were my life, what there was will never be
now am i blind or can i see, kiss me while im still alive
kill me while ill kiss the sky let me learn and let me live
let me die on my or terms
but then you tell me you love him more than me
and all my pain and misery seeks out and covers me
so now i follow on my own way to live on for another damn day
remeber when you were my life, what there was will never be
now am i blind or can i see, kiss me while im still alive
kill me while ill kiss the sky let me learn and let me live
let me die on my or terms
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Oblivion1134 on April 22, 2006, 10:56:16 AM
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I feel sorry for ya manRiversBlood on August 7, 2005, 4:38:30 AM
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Um, I'm not sure why I'm really commenting, but uh, and don't take this rudely, but it needs some more...er structure? When a poem's just in one big paragraph, it's hard to read and understand. Not to mention it makes you look like an beginner. Not to mention you stole two lines from songs. Am I blind or can I see from Iron Man, Black Sabbath. ANd Kill me while I kiss the sky, is similar to Scuse me while I kiss the sky from Jimmy Hendrix. Now, it's not always bad to take some lines, but you have to give some credit to the originals.Trunks_Lover on July 27, 2005, 5:27:32 AM
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AWWWWWWWWW OMG IM SO SORRY!!!!! ....HEY U DONT HAVE TO BE SO MEAN ABOUT IT xSlipnotMunkEEx geeze ....*huggles* im sorry i have not commented in like forever but i been in a depressed mood...sorry *hugz again* u deserve better than her anyway ^^ i hope u feel better if u need to talk to somone im here ^^RavenChild on May 2, 2005, 8:56:21 AM
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....WAH!!!!!!!!!! Reminds me of what my b/f did to me!! Left me for another girl after telling me he loved me!!!! :( WAHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!! *runs in couner crying....*xSlipknotMunkEEx on December 16, 2004, 5:04:31 AM
Hmmm. I was thinking about what you said when we broke up... and I'm gonna be a dog about this to.... Go read all the fracking poems you wrote when I broke up with you for Nick! Now think about how many poems I wrote.. :cough cough cough:: ZIP! You fracker!! LOOK AT WHOS GETTING OVER SOMEONE NOW!xSlipknotMunkEEx on August 31, 2004, 10:39:17 AM
oOoOo Guess what dont worry Ne more i back and i very sorry =\ AND I LOVE YOU TO DEATH! =P Imma Gonna Go Get Sum Plastic Hand Cuffs Now!orange_head on August 21, 2004, 12:49:16 PM
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awwww! *cries* I so sorry!1 *Huggles*Crazedyingyang on August 1, 2004, 9:53:24 AM
I feel like I'm gonna cry.*runs to grab a tissue.*^_^BloodySunAngel on July 26, 2004, 9:38:44 AM
No one can kill- THE GOD OF ANARCHY!! Lol...This is awesome. Why did she dump the God of Anarchy? Evil girl.... eeevvillll.... lemme at her with my bike pump. I break her nose off. XP lol. *favorites*
X2CY on July 26, 2004, 6:28:40 AM
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am gonnae cry ;*( thats ded sad! she sounds like a rite cow anyway, ul do beta. x