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Poem: The Crazy Egyptian

Yah ummm... this here's my first poem in Fanart central... and also it's my first poem with anything to do with YGO, so please don't hate...
...and if you like Yami no Yuugi and/or Rishid, please don't read this...cuz they kinda get hurt...



Chapter 1 - Poem: The Crazy Egyptian
Submitted: April 14, 2005 • Updated: April 14, 2005
Word count: 2008 • Size: 9k • Comments: 27 • views: 678


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_Sanctuary_ on September 9, 2005, 4:13:17 AM

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_Sanctuary_Cool! Very.. interesting...
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Ryoukitten on August 19, 2005, 12:08:14 PM

Ryoukitten on (Chapter: 1)
RyoukittenI luv this poem! You are an awsome writer!!!

shakezula2 on August 15, 2005, 5:39:34 AM

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shakezula2wow thats good the funny thing thow is i was whatching a video of marik and yu-gi-oh and bakura in the old time robing and crap

Mar1lyn_Man5on on July 4, 2005, 1:00:48 AM

Mar1lyn_Man5on on (Chapter: 1)
Mar1lyn_Man5onI love this poem! Great Job, keep up the good work!
*~Mari1yn Man5on~*

Jaded_Skie on June 28, 2005, 11:51:07 PM

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Jaded_SkieExtremely AWESOME!! That must have taken you forever!! But it was worth it!!! What an awesome poem!!

Nemya on June 28, 2005, 6:18:04 PM

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Nemya*glomps you*
Waha! Its totally awesome! I was laughing and everyone in the class thought I was insane. Yes. Im in school. Its a free period, so I get to go on the library computers..
Anyways, I loved it! Totally awesome! Hee, I liked the parts about slicing his dad real slow, and "So get away, you big ugly gay, Or I'll have to chop your head" XDDDDDD
So hilarious! You are so good at writing aswell as drawing! Grak! *faves*

DemonTheifQueen on June 18, 2005, 2:50:41 PM

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DemonTheifQueenHAHAHA! RISHID DIED! MUWAHAHAHAHAHA! >) I'll join you Marik in your killing spree! ^-^

Your awsome hellpoemer!

hellpoemer on May 29, 2005, 5:28:49 AM

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hellpoemerlolz BlackBreeze ^^
yah, ummm i think i was high on chocolates when i wrote this, and that's why it's so ... vernacular? yah, that's the perfect word! besides, i could never sound professional =D

oh, yah! and i switched the names cuz i wanted it to rhyme

Black_Breeze on May 29, 2005, 1:17:52 AM

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Black_BreezePretty good. Interesting story. Although I do have a few things to say about it. . . you switched names a little in the poem, like instead of saying Rishid, you said Odion. I thought that was pretty funny.

Second, you used "bish", "faves", "cuz", and others. In a story/poem you have to use actual words and not just abreviations. That seems a bit unprofessional if you do. The rhythm and rhyme of this poem was excellent however, yet I think Rishid was a bit OOC.

Great job!