Chapter 1 - Simple Dream
Submitted February 17, 2004 Updated February 17, 2004 Status Incomplete | this is my first poem, done on my own attempt, please review and tell me how to make it better, i want to get better.
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Chapter 1 - Simple Dream
Chapter 1 - Simple Dream
The simple sense I need to feel,
is one that makes me real.
From night to day,
fly or stay?
My hope that passes is not real.
For dreams that speak
and demons peak,
monsters home
where I roam,
my life is as not a simple thing.
To dream a dream
may not seem
a ridiculous sort of dream,
but in my home,
my soul unknown,
a dream's dream is not a simple thing.
No people there,
no one cares,
but demons surround,
fire and destruction all around,
to dream a dream in my dreams,
is not a dream but a scream,
of whispered words,
to echo from me,
through all eternity.
is one that makes me real.
From night to day,
fly or stay?
My hope that passes is not real.
For dreams that speak
and demons peak,
monsters home
where I roam,
my life is as not a simple thing.
To dream a dream
may not seem
a ridiculous sort of dream,
but in my home,
my soul unknown,
a dream's dream is not a simple thing.
No people there,
no one cares,
but demons surround,
fire and destruction all around,
to dream a dream in my dreams,
is not a dream but a scream,
of whispered words,
to echo from me,
through all eternity.
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Kaybo_Sasuke on September 24, 2004, 12:41:23 AM
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Yeah, I'm agreeing with RaptorAlien. You really hit a bull's eye^^ That's awesome!RaptorAlien on July 9, 2004, 4:11:46 AM
RaptorAlien on
Wow, I like it. I consider myself more a writer, but I'm no good at poetry. Still, I respect anyone who will give it a shot and you hit a bullseye there, Pyropyrofreak_becca on February 17, 2004, 7:25:56 AM
this is my first poem, EVER, that i wrote souly because I wanted too. please review and tell me if something seems to be bad.