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Chapter 0 - Prologue

I had an urge to write something like i did lol enjoy.xx
it's about twins (boy and girl). they went into what they thought was their garden when they were 13.
6 years later, they were still stuck in it.

Chapter 0 - Prologue

Chapter 0 - Prologue
13/4/2006 15:36

Reminder: Kaley and Jason’s 13th birthday

“I’m tired of staying in the house all the time,” Jason complained, standing up and stretching. “Why can’t we go out into the garden?”

“Because Mom said so. And so did Dad. We’re never allowed in the garden.”

“Why? It’s not like we’re going to walk into a tree, suffer from severe head trauma and die.”

“Actually, you’d be surprised at how much that happens.”

“Don’t be stupid.” He started walking away from her.

“Jason, where are you going?”

“To the garden.”

“Do you have a death wish? If Mom and Dad ever find out—”

“They’re not going to find out.”

“Oh, really. And how do you know that?”

“Kaley, all I’m going to do is walk around it once and come back. I’m tired of being stuck in here all the time. Look outside. Go on. Look.”

Kaley looked outside unwillingly. The garden really was beautiful. She had imagined going there for more times than she could remember.

“See?” Jason said. “It’s a nice day outside. And here we are, stuck inside this stuffy old house, when all our friends get to play in their gardens. It’s not fair.”

“But Jason…”

“You can stay here if you want.” Jason disappeared opened the door to the garden and sunlight poured into the house. “I’m going.”

Kaley sighed. Having Jason as a twin brother was annoying. She got up reluctantly and followed her brother outside the house.

The garden was even more beautiful than she had known it would be. The breeze rippling through her blonde hair, she went around, paying tribute to every flower and plant she saw, loving the floral perfume that lingered in the air.

“Kales!” Jason beckoned to her. “Come over here for a sec.”

Kaley got up and trudged slowly towards her brother. He was probably going to pull another one of his pranks on her. The problem was that she had to listen to him, because he was older than her. Seven and a half minutes older than her, to be precise. Which really wasn’t fair.

“What is it, Jason?” she asked him warily, standing a good distance away from him in case he suddenly dunked water onto her head. It had happened before, and she didn’t look forward to reliving it.

“Come here. Closer.”


“I swear it isn’t some kind of trick. Just come here. I want to show you something.”

“You can show me from here.”

“You can only see it from where I’m standing.”

Kaley looked at her brother suspiciously and decided that for once, he actually looked sincere. “Fine,” she muttered. “But I swear to God, if you—”

He grabbed her and pulled her onto the rock where he was standing and pointed. “Look.”

Kaley looked. “What?”

“Don’t you see it?”

“See what?”

Jason sighed impatiently. “Tell me what you see, Kales.”


“Exactly.” Jason looked at her, and she looked right back at him, wondering what the punch line was.

“What?” she asked him when he looked at her like she was stupid.

“Are you stupid?”

“Shut up and tell me what it is, you freak.”

“Do you see the pond that’s at the back of the garden?” He pointed to the pond that was a few feet away in front of them. “Do you remember what was behind it?”

Kaley looked at him. Was he suffering from short term memory loss? “There’s a wall behind the pond, Jason,” she said slowly and clearly as if talking to a three year old and not a twelve year old one. “A wall that runs all the way around the garden.”

“Exactly,” Jason said, mirroring her tone. “And do you see the wall anywhere?”

Kaley frowned. “It’s gone.”

“No! Really?” Jason drawled sarcastically. “Look at those trees, Kales. We’ve never seen them before when we were looking at the garden from the inside.”

Kaley’s frowned deepened. “For once, you’re actually right.”

“Come on.” He ran towards the trees.

“Jason! Where are you going?” she yelled after him, although she fully knew the answer.

“I want to check it out.”

“Jason! No! We’re supposed to go back in now. Mom and Dad could be home any moment!”

“You can go back if you want.” With that, Jason disappeared into the trees.

“Jason! Jason! Come back here!” There was no sign of him. “I swear to God…” Kaley muttered as she sprinted towards the trees after her brother.

“Jason? Where are you? I’m not kidding now.”


Kaley looked frantically around her. She was surrounded by trees. She whirled around and realised she had no idea how to get out of the forest.

“Where are you? Jason? It’s not funny.”


“Please. I’m scared.”






AGE: 13

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liggybird on June 27, 2009, 9:58:27 PM

liggybird on (Chapter: 12)
liggybirdThese latest chapters are terrific Nata.

Wolves, clandestine journeys (between various tents and elsewhere), rides on ligers, scrolls, surrogate and biological mothering and so on.

I also find it cool how you use plenty of little interpersonal dramas (like Alex accusing Jason of being lazy at the start of this chapter) to bring out your characters' natures.

My understanding of the story's far from perfect - but it's a highly enjoyable ride all the same.

xxnataxx on June 27, 2009, 10:08:56 PM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: 12)
xxnataxxthanks. i havent heard from you for a while. how're you? x

liggybird on June 28, 2009, 4:10:55 AM

liggybird on (Chapter: index)
liggybirdI'm quite well (says he touching wood) thanks. I'm just doing routine stuff like walking into town to shop and have the occasional coffee or, like today, a glass of beer. Yesterday I went to the cinema to see a newly released film called 'Sunshine Cleaning'. I go most places on my own, but it's better than staying in.
It was very nice of you to jog my memory today. I've really enjoyed bringing myself up to date with Kaley's and Jason's adventures. I'm a bit of a romantic, so I'm interested in the 'who's fancying who' aspects of the story as well as the rest of the drama.
I just read two chapters of 'Tia??' and love it so far btw. Keep up the good work. This is some of the best writing I've seen. It's hard to believe you're only fourteen.
Thanks for sharing these stories.

xxnataxx on June 28, 2009, 5:07:17 AM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: index)
xxnataxxoh? how was the film? didnt you go with your son? i stayed at the house (boarding school) today and watched Casino Royale with my friends, pigging out and eating ice cream and coke lol it was the mst brilliant way to waste a day.
thanks for all the compliments (: give me a little critism from time to time, so that my head doesnt get too big lol xx

liggybird on June 28, 2009, 10:16:02 AM

liggybird on (Chapter: index)
liggybirdThe film was very good. (I'd recommend it, but I imagine it's nothing like Casino Royale.) My son went with me last week to see Monsters Versus Aliens. I'd forgotten that when I said I went most places on my own. I had to talk him into going, but he said afterwards he'd enjoyed the film.
Your boarding school sounds cool. Sounds like it's probably a good environment for literary creativity. Have a fabulous summer vacation soon.

xxnataxx on June 28, 2009, 7:34:59 PM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: index)
xxnataxxooh i've always wanted to see monsters vs aliens. lol it's the teenage rebellion phase isnt it?
yea...but they work us pretty hard's just because it's the end of term that they cut us some slack.
thanks...hope you have a great one too (:

Kaley on June 5, 2009, 6:30:36 AM

Kaley on (Chapter: 11)
Kaleyok. that was unexpected. but really cool.

xxnataxx on June 5, 2009, 8:18:11 PM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: 11)
xxnataxxha thanks xx

blackcatcurse on June 2, 2009, 7:57:35 AM

blackcatcurse on (Chapter: 11)

(And lemme guess, the BN is their father. Probly not...)

xxnataxx on June 2, 2009, 6:11:15 PM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: 11)
xxnataxxlol no...but good try xx

xxnataxx on June 2, 2009, 2:47:41 AM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: index)
xxnataxxoh btw i changed the tigers into ligers lol i dont know, but ligers are more powerful and stuff like that so...yea lol

Kaley on June 1, 2009, 6:59:02 AM

Kaley on (Chapter: index)
Kaleyquestion... when's the next chapter coming out?

this was really good!

xxnataxx on June 1, 2009, 8:06:00 PM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: index)
xxnataxxhaha thanks. as soon as possible, i guess...
i'll try to upload a new chapter today (:

Konohasdarkshadow on May 21, 2009, 2:15:23 PM

Konohasdarkshadow on (Chapter: 7)
Konohasdarkshadow:O JJ to the rescue! you made an error! you mixed up some stories XD

“But be sure to tell us if you do,” Kerri added.

you meant Kaley right? ^^. That one confuZled me lol, i was staring at it for like 3 long minutes trying to figure out what it meant, but then realized you meant Kaley

xxnataxx on May 21, 2009, 6:05:20 PM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: 7)
xxnataxxlol and i only typed the wrong name because i was writing both stories at the same time so that kind of confuzzled me lol xx

xxnataxx on May 21, 2009, 6:03:25 PM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: 7)
xxnataxxomgggg thanks for telling me that lol that would've been like a fatal error xx

liggybird on May 21, 2009, 8:35:20 AM

liggybird on (Chapter: 7)
liggybirdIt's interesting to see the various ways in which Kaley asserts herself amongst the others. Having the adversaries meet (confrontationally) in the middle of the night is an excellent way of bringing out some of their conflicts imo. Plenty of interesting things are being revealed through the dialogue. Gripping stuff!

xxnataxx on May 21, 2009, 6:03:47 PM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: 7)
xxnataxxthanks liggy (: xx

blackcatcurse on May 20, 2009, 6:05:46 AM

blackcatcurse on (Chapter: 4)
blackcatcurseThis is turning out interesting...
Keep going!

xxnataxx on May 20, 2009, 8:04:23 PM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: 4)
xxnataxxthanks xx

liggybird on May 20, 2009, 8:01:08 AM

liggybird on (Chapter: 4)
liggybirdThis is astonishingly well written. I like the interactions between these character pairings. Touches of humour, fast paced action, mind games and some terrific description. Exceptionally good.

xxnataxx on May 20, 2009, 8:04:07 PM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: 4)
xxnataxxthanks (: xx

Konohasdarkshadow on May 20, 2009, 8:53:26 AM

Konohasdarkshadow on (Chapter: 4)
Konohasdarkshadowthis is how all of nata's work is!!! she is an A-class writer! you should really check out her other stories too! they are terrific!