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Kaley??

I had an urge to write something like this...so i did lol enjoy.xx
it's about twins (boy and girl). they went into what they thought was their garden when they were 13.
6 years later, they were still stuck in it.

Chapters

Chapters

Chapter 0 - Prologue
Submitted: May 19, 2009 • Updated: May 19, 2009
Word count: 904 • Size: 4k • Comments: 7 • views: 154

Chapter 1 - Chapter One
Submitted: May 19, 2009 • Updated: May 19, 2009
Word count: 310 • Size: 1k • Comments: 0 • views: 143

Chapter 2 - Chapter Two
Submitted: May 19, 2009 • Updated: May 19, 2009
Word count: 1302 • Size: 6k • Comments: 0 • views: 156

Chapter 3 - Chapter Three
Submitted: May 20, 2009 • Updated: May 20, 2009
Word count: 1163 • Size: 5k • Comments: 0 • views: 157

Chapter 4 - Chapter Four
Submitted: May 20, 2009 • Updated: May 20, 2009
Word count: 1013 • Size: 5k • Comments: 5 • views: 170

Chapter 5 - Chapter Five
Submitted: May 21, 2009 • Updated: May 21, 2009
Word count: 697 • Size: 3k • Comments: 0 • views: 148

Chapter 6 - Chapter Six
Submitted: May 21, 2009 • Updated: May 21, 2009
Word count: 757 • Size: 3k • Comments: 0 • views: 158

Chapter 7 - Chapter Seven
Submitted: May 21, 2009 • Updated: May 22, 2009
Word count: 1109 • Size: 5k • Comments: 5 • views: 155

Chapter 8 - Chapter Eight
Submitted: May 22, 2009 • Updated: May 22, 2009
Word count: 632 • Size: 3k • Comments: 0 • views: 157

Chapter 9 - Chapter Nine
Submitted: May 31, 2009 • Updated: May 31, 2009
Word count: 636 • Size: 3k • Comments: 0 • views: 133

Chapter 10 - Chapter Ten
Submitted: May 31, 2009 • Updated: May 31, 2009
Word count: 554 • Size: 2k • Comments: 0 • views: 138

Chapter 11 - Chapter Eleven
Submitted: June 2, 2009 • Updated: June 2, 2009
Word count: 2023 • Size: 10k • Comments: 4 • views: 178

Chapter 12 - Chapter Twelve
Submitted: June 15, 2009 • Updated: June 15, 2009
Word count: 750 • Size: 4k • Comments: 2 • views: 144

Comments

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liggybird on June 27, 2009, 9:58:27 PM

liggybird on (Chapter: 12)
liggybirdThese latest chapters are terrific Nata.

Wolves, clandestine journeys (between various tents and elsewhere), rides on ligers, scrolls, surrogate and biological mothering and so on.

I also find it cool how you use plenty of little interpersonal dramas (like Alex accusing Jason of being lazy at the start of this chapter) to bring out your characters' natures.

My understanding of the story's far from perfect - but it's a highly enjoyable ride all the same.

xxnataxx on June 27, 2009, 10:08:56 PM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: 12)
xxnataxxthanks. i havent heard from you for a while. how're you? x

liggybird on June 28, 2009, 4:10:55 AM

liggybird on (Chapter: index)
liggybirdI'm quite well (says he touching wood) thanks. I'm just doing routine stuff like walking into town to shop and have the occasional coffee or, like today, a glass of beer. Yesterday I went to the cinema to see a newly released film called 'Sunshine Cleaning'. I go most places on my own, but it's better than staying in.
It was very nice of you to jog my memory today. I've really enjoyed bringing myself up to date with Kaley's and Jason's adventures. I'm a bit of a romantic, so I'm interested in the 'who's fancying who' aspects of the story as well as the rest of the drama.
I just read two chapters of 'Tia??' and love it so far btw. Keep up the good work. This is some of the best writing I've seen. It's hard to believe you're only fourteen.
Thanks for sharing these stories.

xxnataxx on June 28, 2009, 5:07:17 AM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: index)
xxnataxxoh? how was the film? didnt you go with your son? i stayed at the house (boarding school) today and watched Casino Royale with my friends, pigging out and eating ice cream and coke lol it was the mst brilliant way to waste a day.
thanks for all the compliments (: give me a little critism from time to time, so that my head doesnt get too big lol xx

liggybird on June 28, 2009, 10:16:02 AM

liggybird on (Chapter: index)
liggybirdThe film was very good. (I'd recommend it, but I imagine it's nothing like Casino Royale.) My son went with me last week to see Monsters Versus Aliens. I'd forgotten that when I said I went most places on my own. I had to talk him into going, but he said afterwards he'd enjoyed the film.
Your boarding school sounds cool. Sounds like it's probably a good environment for literary creativity. Have a fabulous summer vacation soon.

xxnataxx on June 28, 2009, 7:34:59 PM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: index)
xxnataxxooh i've always wanted to see monsters vs aliens. lol it's the teenage rebellion phase isnt it?
yea...but they work us pretty hard sometimes...it's just because it's the end of term that they cut us some slack.
thanks...hope you have a great one too (:
x

Kaley on June 5, 2009, 6:30:36 AM

Kaley on (Chapter: 11)
Kaleyok. that was unexpected. but really cool.

xxnataxx on June 5, 2009, 8:18:11 PM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: 11)
xxnataxxha thanks xx

blackcatcurse on June 2, 2009, 7:57:35 AM

blackcatcurse on (Chapter: 11)
blackcatcurseDUHN. DUHN. DUUUUUUUUHHNNNNNNNN!

(And lemme guess, the BN is their father. Probly not...)

xxnataxx on June 2, 2009, 6:11:15 PM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: 11)
xxnataxxlol no...but good try xx

xxnataxx on June 2, 2009, 2:47:41 AM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: index)
xxnataxxoh btw i changed the tigers into ligers lol i dont know, but ligers are more powerful and stuff like that so...yea lol
xx

Kaley on June 1, 2009, 6:59:02 AM

Kaley on (Chapter: index)
Kaleyquestion... when's the next chapter coming out?

this was really good!

xxnataxx on June 1, 2009, 8:06:00 PM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: index)
xxnataxxhaha thanks. as soon as possible, i guess...
i'll try to upload a new chapter today (:
xx

Konohasdarkshadow on May 21, 2009, 2:15:23 PM

Konohasdarkshadow on (Chapter: 7)
Konohasdarkshadow:O JJ to the rescue! you made an error! you mixed up some stories XD

“But be sure to tell us if you do,” Kerri added.

you meant Kaley right? ^^. That one confuZled me lol, i was staring at it for like 3 long minutes trying to figure out what it meant, but then realized you meant Kaley

xxnataxx on May 21, 2009, 6:05:20 PM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: 7)
xxnataxxlol and i only typed the wrong name because i was writing both stories at the same time so that kind of confuzzled me lol xx

xxnataxx on May 21, 2009, 6:03:25 PM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: 7)
xxnataxxomgggg thanks for telling me that lol that would've been like a fatal error xx

liggybird on May 21, 2009, 8:35:20 AM

liggybird on (Chapter: 7)
liggybirdIt's interesting to see the various ways in which Kaley asserts herself amongst the others. Having the adversaries meet (confrontationally) in the middle of the night is an excellent way of bringing out some of their conflicts imo. Plenty of interesting things are being revealed through the dialogue. Gripping stuff!

xxnataxx on May 21, 2009, 6:03:47 PM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: 7)
xxnataxxthanks liggy (: xx

blackcatcurse on May 20, 2009, 6:05:46 AM

blackcatcurse on (Chapter: 4)
blackcatcurseThis is turning out interesting...
Keep going!

xxnataxx on May 20, 2009, 8:04:23 PM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: 4)
xxnataxxthanks xx

liggybird on May 20, 2009, 8:01:08 AM

liggybird on (Chapter: 4)
liggybirdThis is astonishingly well written. I like the interactions between these character pairings. Touches of humour, fast paced action, mind games and some terrific description. Exceptionally good.

xxnataxx on May 20, 2009, 8:04:07 PM

xxnataxx on (Chapter: 4)
xxnataxxthanks (: xx

Konohasdarkshadow on May 20, 2009, 8:53:26 AM

Konohasdarkshadow on (Chapter: 4)
Konohasdarkshadowthis is how all of nata's work is!!! she is an A-class writer! you should really check out her other stories too! they are terrific!