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A Quiet Slumber

A sad poem

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Chapter 1 - 1
Submitted: August 30, 2005 • Updated: August 30, 2005
Word count: 142 • Size: <1k • Comments: 5 • views: 99

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mikita_inugirl on February 2, 2006, 10:45:14 AM

mikita_inugirl on (Chapter: 1)
mikita_inugirlThis is nice. ^_^

NJ_PUNK on November 17, 2005, 10:45:20 AM

NJ_PUNK on (Chapter: 1)
NJ_PUNKi love it it's playful and depressing.

Himehoshii on September 26, 2005, 1:22:00 AM

Himehoshii on (Chapter: 1)
HimehoshiiThe imagery of the poem is brilliant.

kos on September 24, 2005, 1:17:27 AM

kos on (Chapter: 1)
kosA few typos (I've written this as a separate comment so you can delete my comment after you fix the typos):

Line 4: "slep" -> "sleep"
Line 6: "," -> "." (to keep the pattern)
Line 12: "innocents" -> "innocence"
Line 14: "the" -> "The"
Line 19: "hear" -> "here"

kos on September 24, 2005, 1:13:38 AM

kos on (Chapter: 1)
kosNice poem, it has a way of pulling the reader in through its gentle words and images, even if (or maybe enhanced because) it has a sad ending.