A humans weakness?
July 5, 2004
July 5, 2004
|My idea on what is the humans race weakness. Something i think we as a race deny more than anything.|
Chapter 1 - A humans Weakness?
Submitted: July 5, 2004 • Updated: July 5, 2004
Word count: 1151 • Size: 6k • Comments: 19 • views: 453
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kath on November 14, 2006, 12:51:41 PM
theWriter on February 7, 2006, 7:11:27 AM
gohstann on September 9, 2005, 8:27:52 AM
PacifisticSoldier on October 19, 2004, 12:39:33 PM
Inuyashafan_133 on August 23, 2004, 6:04:48 AM
Crazedyingyang on August 16, 2004, 10:30:53 AM
a-drawer-4ever on July 13, 2004, 4:47:56 AM
Lasher on July 10, 2004, 6:00:33 AM
And Lexar, yeah, your just a little to up tight and close minded for this i think. And Everyone else, well thanks. I really wanted to get some serious comments on it. Glad i all got you for that ^_^ Thanks.
layzcarter on July 10, 2004, 5:55:31 AM
Only one suggestion which coming from me doesn't mean much. I was thinking that maybe in the first and third paragraph you say "petty human emotions". It might flow better if you replace one of the phrases with something else of the same meaning. And the word weak seems to be used a lot. Maybe a thesaurus to change up some of the words. Just a thought. Keep in mind I'm no writer :)
iamem0tionless on July 7, 2004, 3:24:53 PM