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Chapter 1 - 3 of em

ok these are some of my first poems so be nice, constructive critisism is great but dont overdo it k?

Chapter 1 - 3 of em

Chapter 1 - 3 of em
poem one:
Pain and hurt rising,
Depression controlling,
Love surprising,
Friends consolling.
I hate this feeling, so hurting,
Wish the world would just die,
My blood slowly spurting,
Alone at night I cry.
People all over consider me a freak,
They all point and laugh as they see
A tear quickly trickling down my cheek,
Just leave me alone, I plea.
I beg, cry, bleed, scream,
Can't control these emotions much longer,
Too bad its not all just a dream,
Every day this pain grows stronger.
I just can't take this anymore,
I have to find a way out,
Dropping slowly to the floor,
Dead beyond all doubt...


poem 2:
I sit here alone, waiting for you,
Crying softly i whisper your name,
It seems like just yesterday you were here too,
But she had to play the blame game.
If only you cared,
If only you knew,
ill always be sitting here,
Waiting for you...


poem 3:
She cries alone at night,
Every muscle hurts,
Ever since that fight,
Her blood slowly spurts.
She wishes he hadnt left her,
She wanted him to stay so bad,
She feels like a horse being kicked by a spur,
Never happy... always sad.
Maybe one day he'll come back,
Maybe there'll be no more lies,
She hopes next time he won't slack
Because without his love she sould die...





tell me what you think please! there'll be more soon i promise!

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MCRchick25 on January 20, 2007, 11:43:11 AM

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MCRchick25lol i just noticed thers "..." after every first word