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Chapter 1 - The Town of Guilt

hey i''ll try to post smthing which popped into my head :3
hope you''ll liek it >w<

Chapter 1 - The Town of Guilt

Chapter 1 - The Town of Guilt
Once upon a time
there was a town built
the people there did crimes
and it was called the town of guilt

there was a black knight
but this time dressed in white
he took his horse
and left the citizens behind

the were afraid
and ran here and there
trying to escape
they just got nowhere

the devils started smiling
the angels started crying
the strong ones were hiding
the weak ones were fighting

the rich ones were taking
the poor ones were giving
the living ones were dying
the dead ones started living

the angels of death
made from the guilty place
just an empty
souless place

the knight came back
didn't say a word
this time dressed again in black
he left there his sword

he knew the sinners
suffered from fear
because they also knew
that the end for them was near.


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SilverKitsune on September 28, 2010, 4:21:50 PM

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SilverKitsuneThe idea for this poem was good :), the only thing I would suggest is learning how to make it flow. Poems have periods, they don't just run on :). Read a few poems from books so you gain get a feel for the many rhythms they have :)