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The town of guilt

hey i''ll try to post smthing which popped into my head :3
hope you''ll liek it >w<



Chapter 1 - The Town of Guilt
Submitted: February 21, 2010 • Updated: February 21, 2010
Word count: 147 • Size: <1k • Comments: 2 • views: 267


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SilverKitsune on September 28, 2010, 4:21:50 PM

SilverKitsune on (Chapter: 1)
SilverKitsuneThe idea for this poem was good :), the only thing I would suggest is learning how to make it flow. Poems have periods, they don't just run on :). Read a few poems from books so you gain get a feel for the many rhythms they have :)

Renmei on February 21, 2010, 4:57:02 PM

Renmei on (Chapter: index)
Renmeisounds poetic i kinda like it :)