Wakeing up To Murder
Submitted April 16, 2006 Updated April 16, 2006 Status Incomplete | Sarah gets a wakeup call in life..her parents murder
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Chapter 1 - The wakeup Call- Chapter One
Submitted: April 16, 2006 • Updated: April 16, 2006
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theWriter on April 16, 2006, 9:36:03 AM
theWriter on (Chapter: 1)
You have a good idea but before I say anything else you MUST PARAGRAPH everything. IT is difficult to descipher anything from everything because it's all clumped together in a mega-blob. So, each time there's a new idea, thought, thing of speech, person, whatever, there must be a new paragraph.