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Chapter 1 - Vision

Um..yea...this is just me babbling cuz my friend Vee-chan(Blackwolfmoon) asked me to submit something...be as critical as you want, i dont care.

Chapter 1 - Vision

Chapter 1 - Vision
The sky is blue.
That is...true enough.
The grass is green.
Again, it is true.
But I must take a moment to emphasize
How very dull it all is.
Would life not be more brilliant;
More dazzling; more spectacular,
If we could all see?
Now, I do not mean to insinuate
That you are blind. No, I quite doubt
That you would be reading this if you were.
I mean merely that you look with your eyes,
When you could just as easily see with your mind.
I beseech you to close your eyes and see.
Gaze in wonder
As the sky turns gloriously golden.
Stare in awe
As the grass becomes magnificently silver.
Do you see the beauty of the world?
This is the world I live in,
And I hope you see fit to join me.

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Invader_Mira on November 13, 2007, 5:38:43 AM

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Invader_MiraWow...and thats scratch work? ^_^ Cant WAIT to read more. -scampers off-

luckylace222 on October 29, 2007, 7:22:11 AM

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luckylace222:O Wow!!! YOU WERE BORN TO BE A WRITER ALL RIGHT!

xEmotional on October 20, 2007, 11:35:27 AM

xEmotional on
xEmotionalWow, it's full of feeling :] I like it .

YumeXItachi on October 20, 2007, 6:17:56 AM

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YumeXItachiomg...this...this was so...wow....
i can't really explain this emotion but it's just wow....
it's really good

YoriXYamiForever on October 17, 2007, 3:07:41 PM

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YoriXYamiForeverYori: Wow..... Wow...... O_O Wow...... That was..... wow. That was amazing! What a view, I love the emotion! Keep writing!! ^^

angelfox on October 16, 2007, 12:16:31 PM

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angelfoxThis is crazy good! ^_^ *hugs*

sexxygirl93 on October 16, 2007, 11:23:34 AM

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sexxygirl93thats crazy amazing i can totally see wat u mean and i completely agree with wat ur sayin...u should submit more =^-^=
*xHUGGx*

bookworm369 on October 16, 2007, 11:25:55 AM

bookworm369 on
bookworm369wow thanks...i totally thought that sucked

sexxygirl93 on October 16, 2007, 11:36:42 AM

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sexxygirl93not its really good i LOVE it!!!

bookworm369 on October 16, 2007, 12:03:27 PM

bookworm369 on
bookworm369aww well thanks!

Blackwolfmoon on October 16, 2007, 11:18:59 AM

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Blackwolfmooni love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *hugs* you arn't horrible J.T-kun, it awsome! it has lots of emotion to it and meaning.... =D you should submit more *bigger hug*

bookworm369 on October 16, 2007, 11:19:45 AM

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bookworm369really? well i guess i might then...thanks<3