Jini!
Submitted August 1, 2007 Updated February 24, 2008 Status Incomplete | READ Thats all I want...I'm watching you...o.o...
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Chapters
Chapter 1 - Chapter 1: A new life
Submitted: August 1, 2007 • Updated: December 22, 2007
Word count: 7191 • Size: 31k • Comments: 19 • views: 209
Chapter 2 - Chapter 2: School has started for Jini!
Submitted: February 24, 2008 • Updated: February 24, 2008
Word count: 2088 • Size: 9k • Comments: 1 • views: 67
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jackspicer247 on January 15, 2009, 6:43:45 PM
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good story.it looks readable if it wasnt for the way this site sets out stories
Hihachi17 on May 15, 2008, 4:33:17 PM
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Hihachi17 on May 8, 2008, 4:25:42 PM
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JiniSingen on February 24, 2008, 10:04:06 AM
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HikariYugiYamiAtemu on January 23, 2008, 4:34:30 PM
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JiniSingen on January 24, 2008, 10:58:04 AM
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TaisyXPegasus on January 15, 2008, 1:10:24 AM
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JiniSingen on January 15, 2008, 5:37:21 AM
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PataPata on December 21, 2007, 7:10:25 PM
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You're watching me? Are you Santa? O_O
Hahaha, just kidding, just kidding.
I'd like to say that this story is better than some other stories I've read on here.
First, because it's actually written like a story, not as a RP.
Second, there's a good amount of details in it.
And third, there isn't too much spelling/grammar mistakes AKA one can actually understand what is going on. XD
I like the plot of the story and how it starts off.
In addition, it's nice how it's easy to read.
JinixYugi is pretty cute. :3
Mm..I'd like to offer a bit of constructive criticism, but I dunno if you accept it.
It's alright if you don't. (:
Hahaha, just kidding, just kidding.
I'd like to say that this story is better than some other stories I've read on here.
First, because it's actually written like a story, not as a RP.
Second, there's a good amount of details in it.
And third, there isn't too much spelling/grammar mistakes AKA one can actually understand what is going on. XD
I like the plot of the story and how it starts off.
In addition, it's nice how it's easy to read.
JinixYugi is pretty cute. :3
Mm..I'd like to offer a bit of constructive criticism, but I dunno if you accept it.
It's alright if you don't. (:
JiniSingen on December 22, 2007, 3:41:59 AM
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I'm so glad.^^;;; Well since I have a really good friend correcting the stories for me.xD Its even her job!:P
But I would like a critique!Even if it IS the frist chapter...It will get better!Since...I think this chapter was quite boring...^^;;; I'm waiting for chapter 2 to be corrected.^^ But in the near future,I'd like to correct my own fanfic.^^ It would really help me out in English!xD
But I would like a critique!Even if it IS the frist chapter...It will get better!Since...I think this chapter was quite boring...^^;;; I'm waiting for chapter 2 to be corrected.^^ But in the near future,I'd like to correct my own fanfic.^^ It would really help me out in English!xD
PataPata on December 23, 2007, 3:42:07 PM
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Haha, I'm glad that you're glad. (: Oh that's good, first time I heard of an author on here having a friend correct her stories. Well, maybe the Haha, do you pay her? :P
Oh really? I'm sure the story will get better. :D Oh no, this chapter isn't boring, I think it was fairly interesting. And ah, I see. I was wondering why the other chapters aren't up. Haha, true, but it's always good to have someone else look over it. They might see things that you missed. (: And you seem pretty good in English already. XD
Mm..well, when you do that thing where you put a * next to a word the readers' might not know and then later explain what the word means, I think it'd be nice if you placed the meanings at the bottom or right after the word has been used. Hopefully that made sense. XD But yeah, it's kinda strange how the meanings come a few sentences later after the words are used. Of course, that's my opinion so there's no need to listen to it. And I think that's all I can find. Your story is great, I like how you wrote in italics for Jini's thoughts. :3
Oh really? I'm sure the story will get better. :D Oh no, this chapter isn't boring, I think it was fairly interesting. And ah, I see. I was wondering why the other chapters aren't up. Haha, true, but it's always good to have someone else look over it. They might see things that you missed. (: And you seem pretty good in English already. XD
Mm..well, when you do that thing where you put a * next to a word the readers' might not know and then later explain what the word means, I think it'd be nice if you placed the meanings at the bottom or right after the word has been used. Hopefully that made sense. XD But yeah, it's kinda strange how the meanings come a few sentences later after the words are used. Of course, that's my opinion so there's no need to listen to it. And I think that's all I can find. Your story is great, I like how you wrote in italics for Jini's thoughts. :3
JiniSingen on December 24, 2007, 1:17:44 PM
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No I dont pay her.:P I draw some pics for her.xD like chibis of her OC and stuff.^^
OH!!^^ I get it!Since...hm...you know in Word theres a limit in what you write in pages(when you write more then what ur supposed to in that page, you go to another one.^^) and I thought I would sell it as a novel in anime conventions...xD I decided not to...:P I'll just sell art as always.xD
I'll do that!^^ I understood!^^ I'll do that right after I reply all my messages and submit my new pics!x3 Thanks!^^ I'm sure that would help other ppl who will read this!x3
OH!!^^ I get it!Since...hm...you know in Word theres a limit in what you write in pages(when you write more then what ur supposed to in that page, you go to another one.^^) and I thought I would sell it as a novel in anime conventions...xD I decided not to...:P I'll just sell art as always.xD
I'll do that!^^ I understood!^^ I'll do that right after I reply all my messages and submit my new pics!x3 Thanks!^^ I'm sure that would help other ppl who will read this!x3
PataPata on December 25, 2007, 9:03:46 AM
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Hahaha, I was just kidding. :P But that's nice, I'm sure she loves the pictures, since you're a wonderful artist and all. (:
YAY I MADE SENSE :D And ohh, I see. So I guess you were trying to try to fit certain things on certain pages or something like that. You can try selling it as a novel! It'd be awesome if people buy it. :3 But of course people would buy your art, hehe.
Oh you're welcome. And thank you, I'm glad I was able to help some. Haha, you must be busy. ^__^
YAY I MADE SENSE :D And ohh, I see. So I guess you were trying to try to fit certain things on certain pages or something like that. You can try selling it as a novel! It'd be awesome if people buy it. :3 But of course people would buy your art, hehe.
Oh you're welcome. And thank you, I'm glad I was able to help some. Haha, you must be busy. ^__^
JiniSingen on December 26, 2007, 6:37:40 AM
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PataPata on December 26, 2007, 9:25:09 AM
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animecrazyfan on August 14, 2007, 5:56:40 AM
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JiniSingen on August 14, 2007, 10:22:15 AM
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