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Oceanside

This is my Original Story, i came up with it on my own. If you're wondering, the town they live in is Chico, California. Yup, enjoy. And possibly comment? ^^

Chapters

Chapters

Chapter 1 - The Party
Submitted: July 3, 2006 • Updated: July 3, 2006
Word count: 652 • Size: 3k • Comments: 0 • views: 113

Chapter 2 - The Breakup
Submitted: July 3, 2006 • Updated: July 3, 2006
Word count: 472 • Size: 2k • Comments: 0 • views: 104

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BeautifullyDecayed on July 4, 2006, 11:28:43 AM

BeautifullyDecayed on (Chapter: index)
BeautifullyDecayedHey! (This is Daryl)

I like the idea of the story. I'm not really sure where it's going, but i looks good. Just a couple of suggestions. 1) I would make each part longer, the longer they are, the better the story is. A good amount is 1,000-3,000 words. 2) I would try to be more descriptive.

But other than that, this story seems pretty cool.