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Chapter 12 - Chapter 12

Angelish with more detail! ^^ I reposted chapter one with even more detail and chapter two is up as well! :)

Chapter 12 - Chapter 12

Chapter 12 - Chapter 12
I spent the rest of that day going through speech training. I hated it. I just wasn’t good at motivating people. I continued to see the disappointed and scared faces in the illusions and Ted kept yelling at me outside of them. But I never once lost my temper. I was proud of myself for that at least, I reflected as I sat in my couch that night, Mark’s cloak wrapped around my shoulders. I breathed in deeply and massaged my head.
‘Just get through each day and cry at night…” I whispered to myself. I didn’t like being yelled at. I hated it actually…Back when I was alive if anybody yelled at me, I would just snap and would have to defend my pride. It got me into a lot of trouble at school especially. But I was getting better at it. I hadn’t yelled at Ted at all yet.
I slid under the covers on the black couch and spread Mark’s cloak over me again. I fell asleep almost a soon as my head hit the pillow.


It was hot. Really hot. I glanced around and took in the burning midnight black staircase below me and the equally dark path leading though an otherwise fiery field. The sky above was pitch black with a few red stars piercing the blackness. As I watched the flames on the ground flicker and glow crimson against the deep black behind them, a figure appeared at the top of the stairs. The figure wore a black cloak that covered its entire body and a hood that hid its face from my view. It started climbing down the spiral staircase, gracefully avoiding the burning railing and patches of flame that dotted the black stairs themselves. My focus shifted and suddenly it seemed as if I was floating behind the cloaked figure rather than floating above it. It continued to walk down the stairs and I followed the figure, drifting a good few inches off of the ground. The cloaked figure followed the flaming path, as I followed, glancing around every so often to take in the flames and noticing how odd it seemed to see no other people on this path and yet feel like every time I glanced in another direction, some shadowy creature slipped out of my sight and back to the darkness.
The figure soon came upon what it was looking for and paused in it’s confident walking to give a deep curtsy to three other cloaked figures sitting in three different black thrones, inset with blood red rubies.
“You’re Highnesses…” whispered the figure that I had followed here in a woman’s voice, “I have brought it.” She continued.
The figures gave no verbal response. The figure in the far left throne stood up and walked to the woman and stretched out a hand. I shuddered at the long, dull green beetle claw appeared from under the cloak, and grasped the small felt bag that the woman held out to the figures. The beetle creature handed the bag to the thing in the middle throne. The figure on the right of the middle tossed a few coins to feet of the woman. I shivered again as the figure’s bull hoof hand slithered back into the cloak. The figure in the middle reached out to take the felt bag from the beetle figure. I was surprised to see that the middle figure had a normal human hand as opposed to a tentacle or something. Somehow though, that human hand was far more unsettling than the the first two. The middle cloaked figure opened the felt bag and eagerly drew out a small lock of light brown hair.
“I have done what you said. Now please, hold up your half of the bargain: Give me back my brother.” the woman asked in a trembling voice that overflowed with hope.
And then the middle figure spoke. Its voice was deep and low and although one being was speaking, it seemed as if millions of other voices were screaming along with him.
“And indeed, Emily, you have done very well. But we have more for you to do before we give your brother back to you.”


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orliej16 on August 26, 2007, 1:44:29 AM

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orliej16wow! this is spooky and exciting at the same time!! this really is an important chapter!! Cant wait for the next!!
Well done!! ^0^

summerstorm on August 10, 2007, 2:22:31 AM

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summerstormYeah, this chapter is really good at creating atmosphere. The dream/vision thing she had was very creepy and evocative...it reminded me of the Voldy scenes too!

How much are they going to make poor Buzz do before she snaps? Or will she snap...?

Oh, randomly...I liked the detail about Allison not liking being yelled at. I totally identify with that. (I'm a poet like the guy in the middle throne!)

Good chapter! Yay! Update again soon!

dancing_thru_life on August 8, 2007, 11:04:41 AM

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dancing_thru_lifeDun Dun Dun! The creepy dreamlike setting reminds me a bit of the Voldy scenes in Harry Potter.
(That's not a bad thing, don't worry.) You did use the word 'figure' a few too many times, as you said on your profile, but it's not necessarily a big deal.
I'm trying to remember if Emily was a character earlier in the story... I vaguely remember a girl with that name...
I will probably go over the last few chapters some time soon, just to see if she appears in any of them.
(Obviously, I have terrible memory for that kind of thing.)
I like this chapter. Even though it is short, it presents an accurately creepy atmosphere, and the detail is more apparent than it was in previous chapters. YAY JOA!

_theater_freak_147 on August 8, 2007, 2:09:46 PM

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_theater_freak_147Yay! Thanks for the comment Dan! Oh hey I just relized that the guy in the middle throne rhymes in the last thing he says. Haha...